The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of Brindleburg to the city council."Two years ago, the town of Seaside Vista opened a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. Since then, the Seaside Vista Tourism Board has reported a 20% increase in vi

According to the present memo, positive changes were observed in the town of Seaside Vista. These changes are believed to be caused by the opening of a new municipal golf course and a hotel. It is proposed that a similar program should be implemented in Brindleburg.

During the past two years, an increased number of visitors, loan applications in local banks, and the amount of tax money collected were reported in the Seaside Vista town. However, each of these might have been a result of some additional factors. Namely, new visitors might have been attracted by an advertisement campaign, opening of any other recreation facilities in town, or limited access to one of the nearest popular city. New dominating political party of the town, change in the local economic laws directed at business and conditions that local banks set for loans might also have affected the number of new business loan applications during the last year. The memo does not provide any information regarding the tax system of the town. For example, the amount of tax money collected may have increased simply as a result of increased tax percentage. Finally, it is hard to evaluate the degree of the tax money increase as there is no information provided regarding the condition of the Seaside Vista roads and bridges, and therefore, expenses for their improvement.

Taking into consideration the Brindleburg city, it is highly uncertain that building a similar hotel and opening a new municipal golf course may improve the situation in the city. It should be questioned, what kind of entertainment the city has got already. For instance, no high interest in a new golf course would be present if the city already has some. Furthermore, climate, location of the city, the economic situation might not be a suitable platform for a new hotel. As a result, building a new hotel may cause more expenses, rather than revenue, which might lead to bankruptcy. Ultimately, the tax system of the city should be mentioned and evaluated to assure possible increase in the tax revenue.

Overall, the memo does require more detail regarding both the situation in the Seaside Vista town and the city of Brindleburd before taking this proposal into further consideration.

Votes
Average: 5 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.281553398058 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.140776699029 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0922330097087 0.0836205057962 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0339805825243 0.0520304965353 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0121359223301 0.0272364105082 45% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118932038835 0.125424944231 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0655339805825 0.0416121511921 157% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79814227512 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0145631067961 0.026700313972 55% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.138349514563 0.113004496875 122% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0291262135922 0.0255425247493 114% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00728155339806 0.0127820249294 57% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2247.0 2731.13054187 82% => OK
No of words: 371.0 446.07635468 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.05660377358 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377358490566 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288409703504 0.287650121315 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.22371967655 0.208842608468 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.129380053908 0.135150697306 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79814227512 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 207.018472906 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495956873315 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 52.8146618938 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 21.8235294118 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8771503631 57.7814097925 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.176470588 141.986410481 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.724660767414 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 50.6644997622 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 2.49350649351 1.8405768891 135% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.595159995598 0.441005458295 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135780106545 0.135418324435 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0549645848975 0.0829849096947 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.57759565239 0.58762219726 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158346526181 0.147661913831 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.262755226883 0.193483328276 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129265790759 0.0970749176394 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.419811468113 0.42659136922 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0392373686694 0.0774707102158 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.445442424069 0.312017818177 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213219801677 0.0698173142475 31% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.87684729064 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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