The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. The best way to improve Hopewell's economy, and generate additional tax revenues, is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
The intention to improve economy and tax revenues is justifiable. However, the writer's suggestion to copy the methods adopted in the nearby town of ocean view is questionable from the arguments. In other words, learning others' successful experiences ostensibly may not boost, or maybe obstruct, the prosperity of the town of Hopewill.
First of all, despite the fact that tourism increased after the construction of a new municipal golf course and resort hotel, we cannot assert the facility construction accounts for the boom of tourism. As a matter of fact, the logical chain may be reversed. In other words, it is the upswing of tourism that stimulates city designers to build new facilities. The underlying cause of the boom may lie in other fields, such as new amusement parks, advanced technological museum. if the mayor squanders the money in the incorrect places, the construction of indispensable facilities may be hindered, and thus, the speculation of a new golf course and the hotel is futile.
Further, granted the construction of a new golf course and resort hotel do promote tourism, we may be not necessarily capable of utilizing tourism to uphold the economy. perhaps the town of Hopewill lacks resources to become a famous cultural or sightseeing spot. Vain attempts to attract tourists is useless. Unless there are intriguing tourism resources available, it is cursory to duplicate others' ideas.
Finally, even if the tourism resources are abundant, we need still to evaluate whether a new golf course and resort hotel is capable of increase the tourists. before building such facilities, the city governors are obliged to figure out the reason that the town is unattractive at present. The reason that tourists seldomly visit the town may be not a lack of gulf course or resort hotal. perhaps the promulgation is limited, or the transportation is inconvenient, or the tourism resources are not distinctive and sort of vapid. Hastily copying will solve neither of these potential problems. Hence, the mayor needs further investigation on the cause of the current economic problem.
Briefly speaking, the mayor's idea to boost the economy is immature and requires more profound thoughts. before the mayor unravels the underlying course of ocean view's tourism prosperity and understands the current obstacles of promoting the economy in Hopewell, I will remain skeptical about his resolution.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1979 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.14 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.851 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.473 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...x revenues is justifiable. However, the writers suggestion to copy the methods adopted ...
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Line 4, column 479, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...t parks, advanced technological museum. if the mayor squanders the money in the in...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...tilizing tourism to uphold the economy. perhaps the town of Hopewill lacks resources to...
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Line 10, column 160, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
...el is capable of increase the tourists. before building such facilities, the city gove...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 351, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun gulf seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lack of gulfs'.
Suggestion: a lack of gulfs
...ists seldomly visit the town may be not a lack of gulf course or resort hotal. perhaps the pro...
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Line 10, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
... a lack of gulf course or resort hotal. perhaps the promulgation is limited, or the tra...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 23, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mayors'' or 'mayor's'?
Suggestion: mayors'; mayor's
...mic problem. Briefly speaking, the mayors idea to boost the economy is immature a...
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Line 13, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
...re and requires more profound thoughts. before the mayor unravels the underlying cours...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30909090909 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93547865145 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527272727273 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2805304637 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267348341958 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687216003063 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606841927455 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14272828132 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0130888862758 0.0628817314937 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.