The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Alta Manufacturing."During the past year, Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour

In the preceding argument, the author states Alta factory has to decrease the working hours in order to mitigate on-the-job accidents, the conclusion of the argument is based on the following premises. Firstly, the author bolsters his claim by mentioning the nearby Panoply factory, and their success in decreasing the accident numbers. Secondly, he assumes by decrease working hours, the employees will be able to sleep more and get some rest. Hence, at the first glance it may seem plausible. However, a careful scrutiny sheds light on plethora of assumptions that could undermine the value of the argument.

To begin with, the argument states that on-the-job accidents has increased to 30 percent and the direct cause is the lengthy working hours that end with worker's fatigue. but, the author readily has assumed the cause. In deed, to be more convincing several question would be answered. Firstly, we would need to know how did he know the direct cause of the accidents? It might be due to lack of experience or low level of facilities. But more than this we would need to know is it the 30 percent a significant number indicates high level of accidents. In other words, does it reflect alarming rate? Therefore, no thing toward bolsters the assumption. And in order to strengthen it the author has to answer these questions precisely.

Secondly, the author assumes that the two factories are the same and what works with Panoply factory is mandatory will work with the Alta company. But it could differ in myriad factors such as what is the Panoply field of work? It might be a safe field and no need to restrict safety measures, further what about their workers number is it the same? Also, we do not have complete information to reflect their success on the Alta company. Consequently, the sources of difference it could be the cause of their success. hence, the argument is without basis and to boost his case he has to provide more information.

Thirdly, the fallacy of the argument also lies in assuming that by decreasing the work hours the workers will take a rest and sleep more, but this assumption is not plausible because may will enable them to do more activities and will impact the situation in negative way. Thus, the author has to think in better ways how decrease the accidents rate, perhaps by doing more workshops or teaching them the safety precautions.

In conclusion, the argument fails to mention one key factor. Namely, all the previous assumption are equivocal. Hence, without complete information the argument is unsubstantiated and opened to debate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, as to, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95412844037 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65398589063 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493119266055 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.0714838685 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.44 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.48 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152161743046 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036513156457 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409504429991 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805366481581 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355658805997 0.0628817314937 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2094 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.803 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.957 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.037 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.48 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5