The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the argument, the author compares to pest control companies Fly-Away Pest Control and Buzzoff Pest Control Company and says Buzzoff pest control is better than the other one based on some information.
The argument above is well presented and seems relatively sound at very first glance: since in case of Fly-Away pest control , $20000 had been destroyed by pest damange in comparison with $10,000 worth food in case of Buzzoff Pest control. However, if more light is shed on the argument and more detailed facts are provided different explanation can be provided and this can lead to many questions which needs to be answered to make the argument persuasive.
First of all, author compares the $20,000 worth wasted food with $10,000 wasted food without considering the quantity of the food. Author assumes that services of Fly-Away is not satisfactory because they money associated with the food is more than Buzzoff , however food can be costly and less in quantity making Fly-Away more successful in destroying pests.
second, author does not give any other information which can make the argument more persuasive like weather conditions. There might be a possibility that weather conditions are different in both cities. Author also fails to mention when and in which month the services of the two business are acquired. The services of Fly-Away pest control is taken last month and we dont get any further data. What if the weather is humid and torrid in that month which can lead to more of pests as compared to when did Food Storage company acquired the services of Buzzoff. If the weather conditions are different in the two cities, it is illogical to make a comparison between two cities.
Further, Author also lacks in providing any kind of statistical evidence-bar chart, pie chart, graph etc., which might answer few questions. Author should have done a complete and objective analysis of the two companies working patterns, timings in order to find out which one is most effective.
In summary, argument is not so convincing as it seems. Without facts, figures, statistics argument will lie on the wrong side of the ledger. To make it more convincing author should answer few things as the quantity of the food , weather conditions in the two cities, whether food quantity was same for both of the companies etc.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1894 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.481 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.203 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other one based on some information. The argument above is well presented and...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...: since in case of Fly-Away pest control , 0000 had been destroyed by pest damange...
^^
Line 9, column 253, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...iated with the food is more than Buzzoff , however food can be costly and less in ...
^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more successful in destroying pests. second, author does not give any other i...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
... successful in destroying pests. second, author does not give any other informa...
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Line 13, column 369, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...pest control is taken last month and we dont get any further data. What if the weath...
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Line 17, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o find out which one is most effective. In summary, argument is not so convincin...
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Line 21, column 228, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r few things as the quantity of the food , weather conditions in the two cities, w...
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Line 21, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er conditions in the two cities, whether food quantity was same for both of the c...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, well, in summary, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03865979381 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55662131666 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474226804124 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1908266268 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.1875 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302298740854 0.218282227539 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962191149519 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977463722806 0.0701772020484 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166136402595 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0895008729946 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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