The following appeared as part of an annual report sent to stockholders by Olympic Foods, a processor of frozen foods:
“Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. The same principle applies to the processing of food. And since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its 25th birthday, we can expect that our long experience will enable us to minimize costs and thus maximize profits.”
As a part of annual report sent to its shareholders,Olympic foods, a frozen foods processing company claimed that it would be able to minimize costs and maximize profits because of its experience of over 25 years in the industry.But the claim is baseless because of lack of<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="have "></span> evidence to support its claim.Also, it uses an illogical analogy with a paint processing company to justify its position.
Firstly,the evidence provided by company which is an analogy to a color processing firm’s manufacturing costs with change in time is quite illogical.Although the company operates in processing industry the raw material is color unlike food and food has various aspects especially seasonality,regional factors as it is an essential consumer good unlike color which is a capital good used for clothing,buildings,paintings etc.
And the company Olympic foods doesn’t give the exact specifics of why the manufacturing costs have decreased for the painting company with time it is not necessarily because of the increase in efficiency of company due to which the manufacturing costs had decreased for the company.So,not only the analogy is quite illogical the statement given in the analogy itself doesn’t have sufficient evidence to prove its truth.
Secondly,the company only relies its claim on the single factor of experience but doesn’t mention any other factors which involve in reducing the cost of processing.Also,it failed to mention how experience is useful to improve the efficiency and thus decrease the costs.Also it assumes that only cost reduction is the main factor for improving profit which is not true.It failed to mention another important component which is the sales and thus the main assumption of the company is that it would at least have sales as much as the previous year and thus the reduction in costs will create profit.
To conclude,Although the company had stated some evidence to support its claim,the evidence is clearly not sufficient enough to support its bold claim of improved margins.The company should have stated specific factors that improve profit margins for a company in the food processing sector and explain how these factors are being improved by the company to improve the margins.
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- The following appeared as part of an annual report sent to stockholders by Olympic Foods, a processor of frozen foods:“Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In colo 83
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1874 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.919 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.63 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 63.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.352 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.523 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.901 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Olympic
...f annual report sent to its shareholders,Olympic foods, a frozen foods processing compan...
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Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...rience of over 25 years in the industry.But the claim is baseless because of lack o...
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Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...;> evidence to support its claim.Also, it uses an illogical analogy with a pa...
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Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...pany to justify its position. Firstly,the evidence provided by company which is a...
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Although
... with change in time is quite illogical.Although the company operates in processing indu...
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Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , regional
...s various aspects especially seasonality,regional factors as it is an essential consumer ...
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Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , buildings
...hich is a capital good used for clothing,buildings,paintings etc. And the company Olymp...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...ing costs had decreased for the company.So,not only the analogy is quite illogical...
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Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , not
...g costs had decreased for the company.So,not only the analogy is quite illogical the...
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Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...evidence to prove its truth. Secondly,the company only relies its claim on the si...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...olve in reducing the cost of processing.Also,it failed to mention how experience is ...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
... in reducing the cost of processing.Also,it failed to mention how experience is use...
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Line 7, column 276, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
... efficiency and thus decrease the costs.Also it assumes that only cost reduction is ...
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Line 7, column 276, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... efficiency and thus decrease the costs.Also it assumes that only cost reduction is ...
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Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
... for improving profit which is not true.It failed to mention another important com...
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Line 9, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Although
...costs will create profit. To conclude,Although the company had stated some evidence t...
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Line 9, column 21, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l create profit. To conclude,Although the company had stated some evidence to ...
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Line 9, column 80, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...tated some evidence to support its claim,the evidence is clearly not sufficient enou...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...port its bold claim of improved margins.The company should have stated specific fac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, at least, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 357.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51820728291 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.77255292969 2.78398813304 136% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459383753501 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 22.8473053892 311% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.0946778691 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 394.0 119.503703932 330% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.4 23.324526521 306% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.2 5.70786347227 266% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139694385585 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907810932734 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580057909115 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907810932734 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580057909115 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.3 14.3799401198 280% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9.05 48.3550499002 -19% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.2 12.197005988 264% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.92 12.5979740519 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.32208582834 127% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 11.1389221557 273% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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