The following article appeared in business magazine. The Author argue that for better success in business firm one who need hire people keep only one criteria only one sleep hours of that employee. The author want to strongly convey that if an employee having sleep of night less than six hour, would be most give profitable margin to firm. There are several assumption made in this arguments. so before implementing this procedure in hiring must see arguments.
Firstly Authors had made assumption on basis of survey, which not provide an evidence. whether survey is reliable? again 300 male and female executives the specific ratio such male to female ratio not provided.In that this 300 people may fit all because of there several activities such as exercise, yoga etc. Again there medical fitness not specified, whether they all are fit or not. Even consider for male and female, male may have practice of six hours night sleep. but rather for female this things make affected because of several reason. for example if they were married so family priorities are came in to picture.
Secondly The Author made assumption that those employee who need less that six hours night sleep had higher margin and faster growth. There are several ways for improving to higher margin and faster growth for better success of firm. Only getting sleep of six hours and doing work regerously can't made employee in growth. Even if Employee work, whether he continuously perform with same efficiency. Whether there physical fitness maintain. some other health issue start such headache.
Lastly on the basis of study, authors made strong assumption that business hire only people who need less than six hours sleep per night. whether study consider all the fact about hiring employee. whether study provide any statistical data which show by implementing such thing once this graph may goes up.
To sum up with all this, arguments become week argument as there are missing of evidence. hence to make argument author need to provide evidence.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 19 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 336 350
No. of Characters: 1659 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.281 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.938 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.221 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.257 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...peared in business magazine. The Author argue that for better success in business fir...
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Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one criterion', 'a criterion', or simply 'criteria'?
Suggestion: one criterion; a criterion; criteria
...firm one who need hire people keep only one criteria only one sleep hours of that employee. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... only one sleep hours of that employee. The author want to strongly convey that if ...
^^^
Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hour' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hours'.
Suggestion: hours
...yee having sleep of night less than six hour, would be most give profitable margin t...
^^^^
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...ve profitable margin to firm. There are several assumption made in this arguments. so before imple...
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Line 1, column 360, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...table margin to firm. There are several assumption made in this arguments. so before imple...
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Line 1, column 379, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...m. There are several assumption made in this arguments. so before implementing this ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 395, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...eral assumption made in this arguments. so before implementing this procedure in h...
^^
Line 1, column 395, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eral assumption made in this arguments. so before implementing this procedure in hiring m...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
... survey, which not provide an evidence. whether survey is reliable? again 300 male and ...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Again
...n evidence. whether survey is reliable? again 300 male and female executives the spec...
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Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... such male to female ratio not provided.In that this 300 people may fit all becaus...
^^
Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...have practice of six hours night sleep. but rather for female this things make affe...
^^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ours night sleep. but rather for female this things make affected because of several...
^^^^
Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...le this things make affected because of several reason. for example if they were married so fa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ake affected because of several reason. for example if they were married so family ...
^^^
Line 3, column 604, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...y were married so family priorities are came in to picture. Secondly The Author m...
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Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this employee' or 'those employees'?
Suggestion: this employee; those employees
...econdly The Author made assumption that those employee who need less that six hours night slee...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... of six hours and doing work regerously cant made employee in growth. Even if Employ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'performs'.
Suggestion: performs
... Employee work, whether he continuously perform with same efficiency. Whether there phy...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tinuously perform with same efficiency. Whether there physical fitness maintain. some o...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...hether there physical fitness maintain. some other health issue start such headache....
^^^^
Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ed less than six hours sleep per night. whether study consider all the fact about hirin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 140, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...d less than six hours sleep per night. whether study consider all the fact about hirin...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 199, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...der all the fact about hiring employee. whether study provide any statistical data whic...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hence
...ument as there are missing of evidence. hence to make argument author need to provide...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: hence,
...ument as there are missing of evidence. hence to make argument author need to provide...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 335.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08656716418 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31445523869 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516417910448 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5050665555 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0869565217 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5652173913 23.324526521 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188991748463 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514773760768 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586809660046 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100448113972 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603199738288 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.3799401198 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.197005988 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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