Two new factories have opened in Dillton with more than 1,000 employees after the implementation of policies, such as the decreased corporate tax and generous relocation grants to any company that move to Dillton. However, the unemployment rate did not change. The author of the newspaper article asserts that the only explanation of this situation is that factories hire out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents. It is indeed a plausible explanation, but certainly not the only one. In following situations unemployment rate can still be unchanged with two new factories hiring more than 1,000 Dillton residents.
The first possibility is that some residents in Dillton who had a job before recently became unemployed. Even if the two new factories hired Dillton residents, the overall number of residents who do not have a job remain constant. In the article, we know that Dillton city hall spend huge amount of money on attracting new factories, it could lead to budget cutting down in other fields, such as education and welfare. Public schools would fire teachers due to low budget. People who received reduced welfare would spend less money in grocery stores and restaurants, thus these business would have less income and customers, which could also lead to employees getting fired. Those people who get fired in scenarios above, such as teachers, retail cashiers, and chiefs could contribute to the overall number of unemployment population. In this case, the unemployment rate keep still even if the two new factories hired Dillton residents.
The second possibility is that the number of unemployed population decreased but at the same time the whole number of Dillton residents also declined, making the unemployment rate constant. It is possible that the new factories which hired local people but made the area not suitable to live anymore. Factories can make a place impossible to live in many ways, such as air pollution, water pollution, noises and so on. If this is the case, residents as well as other business providing services for local residents could have been immigrated out of Dillton, such as shopping malls, movie theaters and restaurants. In this case, the numerator, unemployed population, and the denominator, the overall population, decrease at the same time, making the unemployment rate constant.
In conclusion, even though the author propose a reasonable explanation for the unchanged unemployment rate, it is certainly not the only explanation. Other possibilities such increased unemployment population in other business and the overall population decline can also cause this situation with new factories hiring local people.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
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flaws:
for GRE argument essays, at least we need to bring 3 arguments.
according to the definition of unemployment rate:
unemployment rate = total number of unemployed people / total work force
we may give other reasons like:
maybe a lot of people move to this city because of new job opportunities, so the total work force will be more, and total number of unemployed people will be more in the meantime.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2202 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.243 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.79 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.44 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.509 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 507, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'situations'' or 'situation's'?
Suggestion: situations'; situation's
...ertainly not the only one. In following situations unemployment rate can still be unchange...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3880952381 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89586753026 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480952380952 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.020262643 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.105263158 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131263769853 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468310357171 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420527965676 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0819274741978 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438664939966 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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