The following appeared as part of an article in a local newspaper:
Over the past three years the tartfish industry has changed markedly: fishing technology has improved significantly, and the demand for tartfish has grown in both domestic and foreign markets. As this trend continues, the tartfish industry on Shrimp Island can expect to experience the same over-fishing problems that are already occurring with mainland fishing industries: without restrictions on fishing, fishers see no reason to limit their individual catches. As the catches get bigger, the tartfish population will be dangerously depleted while the surplus of tartfish will devalue the catch for fishers. Government regulation is the only answer: tartfishfishing should be allowed only during the three-month summer season, when tartfish reproduce and thus are most numerous, rather than throughout the year.
The author of this article of a newspaper assumes that the tartfish industry will be overfished similar to other mainland fishing industries because the demand of tartfish has grown and the fishing technology has improved significantly. This assumption that the is a correlation among the mainland industries and tartfish industry in Shrimp Island is drawn from a weak analogy. The writer concludes that the introduction of some restriction should reduce over-fishing problems, without any regulations the catches get bigger and the surplus of tartfish will devalue the catch for fishers. The proposed solution of government regulation of tartfish is also weak because it is based on false assumption.
First, the premise of the argument is weak because it is based on a comparison among fishing industries that may be not similar for different reason. The author assumes that there will be an increase in the fishing industries in Shrimp Island because mainland indutries will sperimented a growth. The writer does not take into consideration that every industry is different and that the demand for tartfish might be greater than the supply.There aren’t no evidence to indicate that what will happen in other industrie will also happened in tartfish.
Second, the author states that the introduction of same regulation could stopped the overfishign ignoring that the fishermen may have other motivation to interrupt their activity, forx example a respetct for enviromental problems.
Finally, the writer concludes this argument assuming that tartfishing should be allowed only during the three-month summer season, when tartfish reproduce and thus are most numerous , rather than throughout the year. This assumes that allowing fishing only the reproductive season would be the best because in this period they are more numerous- However, if the fish are caught during theri repruductive season, then the reproductive is likely to be interrupeted, resulting in fewer tartfish the following year.
In conclusion, to strenghtened the argument the author should be provide some information to make his position to appear stronger. The development of a fishing policy for tartfish should be based on indutry research. Proceeding with an overfishing policy based on false assumption could create economic problems for the tartfish industry. It would ne unwise for the tartsih industry to follow the author’s calls without first conducting more research into the factors affecting supply and demand in tartfish industry.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...sumption that the is a correlation among the mainland industries and tartfish ind...
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...an increase in the fishing industries in Shrimp Island because mainland indutries...
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...eration that every industry is different and that the demand for tartfish might b...
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...rtfish might be greater than the supply.There aren't no evidence to indicate tha...
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...ish reproduce and thus are most numerous , rather than throughout the year. This a...
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...pruductive season, then the reproductive is likely to be interrupeted, resulting ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56330749354 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92738466661 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49354005168 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9687418577 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.785714286 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6428571429 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275946974113 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107386621344 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714869359331 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148266293891 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078819794629 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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