The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
The author mentions very valid.But still there are few important evidences that needs to be inspected to inorder the evaluate whether road development should be prohibited or not near the edges of wetlands.
Ancient records suggested that there were millions of tufted groundhog in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. It is important here to understand the causes for decline in these numbers. Was it because of human encroaching their habitat? Or could it be because of the Darvin's theory which states 'Survival of the fittest'.?There could also be plausible explaination that over the time these tufted groundhog migrated to a different habitat which suited more to their existance in the changing times.
The argument shares an example oh how a repeal in sanctuary status of neighbouring eastern carpenteria has seen a decline in the population of sea otter. Although the exampled mentioned is worth pondering, it is important to dig deeper and understand what were the real causes of sea otter's population reduction. Was it just the revoking of sanctuary status which might or might not have lead to development of urban infrastructure around it? Or is it because of some natural calamity that the place has suffered. Migration among species for survival and food search is equally popular phenomena. It is important to assert this questions inorder to validate the relevance of the example in the context of building roads around Westland.
The local developmment is lobying to access the roads near the wetlands, which the argument considers as a threat to the region's biodiversity because it would lead to increased urbanisation near the region. Although a very valid concern, it is of importance to account for what type of road construction demands are being made by the local development body. If it is a narrow road for small vehicles to pass through so that travel becomes convinient, the biodiversity might not have large impact. Also if the local body proposes to ensure strict rules and impose heavy fines on the troublemakers, the coast can very well preserve its natural habitat. Hence it is very important to consider what is the complete proposal put forth by local development body and only then a relevan action could be chosen.
However it equally important to observe that history has taugh has, wherever industrialisation happened and brick forests were built, the natural habitat nad the biodiversity did suffer to some extent. In some cases it even lead to their extinctions like African Rhinosauras. Hence the concern mentioned in letter of the argument has its merits and connot be oversighted.
The argument mentioned though has some very valid points, it is important to consider the various evidences mentioned in the complete prespective and not look from one angle only. Only on a thorough review any decision should be made.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2359 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.03 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.767 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.909 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: But
The author mentions very valid.But still there are few important evidences...
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...s that needs to be inspected to inorder the evaluate whether road development should be proh...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...y which states Survival of the fittest.?There could also be plausible explaination th...
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Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
...rstand what were the real causes of sea otters population reduction. Was it just the r...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
...e argument considers as a threat to the regions biodiversity because it would lead to i...
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Suggestion: Also,
...odiversity might not have large impact. Also if the local body proposes to ensure st...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...very well preserve its natural habitat. Hence it is very important to consider what i...
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Suggestion: However,
...en a relevan action could be chosen. However it equally important to observe that hi...
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Message: Did you mean 'leads'?
Suggestion: leads
...r to some extent. In some cases it even lead to their extinctions like African Rhino...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...r extinctions like African Rhinosauras. Hence the concern mentioned in letter of the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, so, still, then, well, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15631691649 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85367076828 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516059957173 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1599200511 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.666666667 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2380952381 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0951984428733 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037569162593 0.0743258471296 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118533665905 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0492760369051 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849792312603 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 98.500998004 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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