The parent claims that Swift Nutrition is serving meals that some students find unappetizing and they should be replace with another vendor. However, there are many assumptions in the letter which need to be evaluated before agreeing with the prediction.
Firstly, it is claimed by the parent that their son and several of his friends were complaining about the lunch options. However, this does not mean that a majority of the students do not find the food enjoyable. Therefore, all the students must be asked their opinion of the food; if a majority of them find it enjoyable, then this matter need not be taken any further, as only a few students have a problem. However, if a large portion of the students find the food disgusting, then the principal needs to look into the issue.
Additionally, the parent predicts that students will start bringing their own food which is unhealthy. However, there is no evidence backing that food made at home is less healthy than food made at the cafeteria. In fact, it is not even known how the lunches are made at the cafeteria. For instance, it is entirely possible the cafeteria kitchen is not maintained properly which might cause the food which is cooked there to be unhealthy.
The final question which needs be asked is -- who will replace Swift Nutrition? this will determine if replacing Swift Nutrition is a good idea. For instance, the new vendor might serve very unhealthy but enjoyable food or even worse, very unhealthy food which is bland! Therefore the new vendors must be carefully considered before replacing swift nutrition.
In conclusion, Although the parent predicts that there will be severe health consequences for the students, there are several flaws that need to be evaluated carefully. To properly evaluate the argument, the opinions of all students must be considered and also the new vendor must be thoroughly evaluated.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'replaced'?
Suggestion: replaced
...ts find unappetizing and they should be replace with another vendor. However, there are...
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Line 7, column 81, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...is -- who will replace Swift Nutrition? this will determine if replacing Swift Nutri...
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Line 7, column 272, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...se, very unhealthy food which is bland! Therefore the new vendors must be carefully consi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 55.5748502994 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 316.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0253164557 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6382690034 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496835443038 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1828822576 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.866666667 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112973425673 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459802501855 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306103992905 0.0701772020484 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0710026012172 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275435454953 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.