In the memo, the author has suggested to build a golf course and resort hotel as a way to improve Hopewell's economy. The author has come to such a conclusion based on the success of hotel and golf course in the nearby town of Ocean View and the increase in tourism in the town of Ocean View. While the claim drawn might ultimately prove valid, the prompt as it stands is based on several assumptions that if not substantiated, dramatically weakens the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all, the author assumes that the tourism in Hopewell has also increased similar to that of Ocean View. Perhaps Ocean View is located near the coastal regions because of which tourism is constanly growing in Ocean View, whereas Hopewell may not provide tourist with the same geographic advantages that Ocean View provides. It is possible that visitors are visiting Ocean View for its cultural sites and not for newly built municipal golf course and resort hotel. If the above scenarios are true than the argument to built hotel and golf course in Hopewell does not hold water.
Second of all, there can be other reasons for the increase in tax revenues collected in Ocean View. Perhaps the number of people resiting in Ocean View are increasing and the rise in tax revenues is simply due to the property tax collected from the new householders in the town and it has nothing to do with tourism boost in the town of Ocean View. There is a possibility that Ocean View has lots of fallow land and many farmers have gained interest in purchasing these lands and paid the tax associated to the land, which in turned has increased in the tax revenues by a significant amount. If the above cases hold merit, then the argument is significantly weakened.
Lastly, the author presumes that there is absence of golf course and resort hotel in Hopewell. It is possible that Hopewell has numerous golf courses and resort hotel but is lacking in other facilities that are provided in Ocean View. For example, Ocean View may have different kinds of spa and massage parlour which has gained public attention. Thus constructing golf course and hotel similar to Ocean View will not be frutiful for a boost in tourism as well as to increase the overall tax revenue in Hopewell. If the above cases prove true then the argument is not overly persuasive.
In conclusion, while the author might have not considered the given situtation regarding building of resort and golf course for boost in Hopewell's economy in its entirety, the conclusion and information associated with it cannot be written off either. There is no smoke without fire and the author must have had compelling reason to make such a strong conclusion, however, since the reasons have not been listed here, the argument as it stands cannot be said holistic. More evidence for the stated assumptions needs to be provided by the author to make the given argument stronger.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2371 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.723 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.476 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.096 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.367 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 513, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...se the overall tax revenue in Hopewell. If the above cases prove true then the arg...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, second, so, then, thus, well, whereas, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81474103586 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52564268461 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416334661355 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1675390908 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.210526316 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4210526316 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35972559984 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129311514783 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108207043363 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226158451121 0.128457276422 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105437810553 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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