The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Memo states that the Ocean View two years ago, built new municipal golf course and resort hotel. Which resulted in the proliferation of tourism revenue and their tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. So the mayor of this place providing an idea to increase their revenue alike Ocean view by building new resorts and golf course. Mayor's intuition about the increase in tax revenue is strongly questionable. Because the mayor believing that Ocean view revenue increased only after building the gold course and resorts is superficial. Even if it is true, Ocean view idea of building their resorts deeply relied on their environment and level of tourism to be expected.
Firstly, the mayor who is intended to increase the revenue of the state should deeply consider and try to analyse whether Ocean view tax's revenues are increase only because of the new buildings they brought in. Since there is no evidence providing the tourism is the only reason which increased the revenue. Even if it is the case the state should also analyse what is the tourism's strength previously and currently in Ocean view. What if the Ocean view tourism is already burgeoning and resorts where required in order to accommodate the surfeit of tourists in their place.
Secondly, Ocean view new building might have been well suited and environments pleasant's nature could have thrived the tourist to visit. Which could have also resulted in increased tourism. Since their environment aspects supported them, state cannot be very sure that their environment will also support the same cause. Since they cannot be relying on this new idea. Other than this, the state could try to analyse the issue in which they are currently facing. State's economy completely depends on developing and enhancing the existing features. So they can try to avert the hindrance which is being a burden to increase their economy.
Additionally, state should also consider what type of business and market they have, which Ocean view relied on and what suited them. Because it might be a coastal area which suited fishing and other coastal related business, so they should analyse about the types of business which they can bring to their state to make sure their economy goes up.
In conclusion, idea to increase their revenue by building new resorts and golf course should be reconsidered. Since there is no solid ground in the idea and the event could result in spending money and not earning anything for the investment. Thus by providing keen analysis on the economy of Ocean view, their strengths in tourism, business activities, existing and previous economical status should give them better view of proceeding their intentions to grow their economy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e of the new buildings they brought in. Since there is no evidence providing the tour...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'tourisms'' or 'tourism's'?
Suggestion: tourisms'; tourism's
...e state should also analyse what is the tourisms strength previously and currently in Oc...
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Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ould have thrived the tourist to visit. Which could have also resulted in increased t...
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Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nment will also support the same cause. Since they cannot be relying on this new idea...
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Line 9, column 244, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ot earning anything for the investment. Thus by providing keen analysis on the econo...
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Line 9, column 377, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...iness activities, existing and previous economical status should give them better view of ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'in conclusion', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255670103093 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.185567010309 0.15541462614 119% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0556701030928 0.0836205057962 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0515463917526 0.0520304965353 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0556701030928 0.0272364105082 204% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.113402061856 0.125424944231 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0577319587629 0.0416121511921 139% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.45602162275 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0268041237113 0.026700313972 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0020618556701 0.001811407834 114% => OK
Determiners: 0.0762886597938 0.113004496875 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0350515463918 0.0255425247493 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0268041237113 0.0127820249294 210% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2718.0 2731.13054187 100% => OK
No of words: 448.0 446.07635468 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06696428571 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350446428571 0.378187486979 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.274553571429 0.287650121315 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.180803571429 0.208842608468 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0915178571429 0.135150697306 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45602162275 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 207.018472906 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.469332199767 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.0700200447 52.1807786196 92% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.3636363636 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5466308445 57.7814097925 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.545454545 141.986410481 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 23.2022227129 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.724660767414 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 47.8189935065 51.9672348444 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.45774647887 1.8405768891 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456959952013 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.137725902972 0.135418324435 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0716351728026 0.0829849096947 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.539522013169 0.58762219726 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153010906348 0.147661913831 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191622129715 0.193483328276 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113870171479 0.0970749176394 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.401363694785 0.42659136922 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.105722335729 0.0774707102158 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311470286373 0.312017818177 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130057692193 0.0698173142475 186% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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