In a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell, a recommendation was made to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in the nearby town of Ocean View, in order to generate additional tax revenues. This is due to the fact that the new golf course and resort hotel at Ocean View have caused tourism to increase within the past two years. Additionally, new businesses have opened at Ocean View and tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. In order for this recommendation to be substantial, three assumptions must be thoroughly examined.
Firstly, the mayor, in making his recommendation, assumes that the town of Hopewell is relatively comparable to the town of Ocean View. However, this may not be the case. The name of the town itself suggests that the town of Ocean View is situated within close proximity to the ocean- where numerous tourists often opt to spend their vacations. Let’s say for instance that the town of Hopewell is located in some undesirable area such as a crime ridden community or a busy city. Then, adding a golf course and resort hotel will not attract tourists to those areas and the mayor’s recommendation would prove to be unviable.
Secondly, the mayor assumes in his memo that the reason for the increase in tourism and tax revenues at Ocean View is a result of the new golf course and resort hotel, and not something else that may have changed in that town. What if it is the new businesses that were added in the Ocean View that led to the increase? Perhaps new restaurants, casinos, spas, retail stores or movie theatres actually attracted increased tourism, and not the golf course and resort hotel. Then, adding a golf course and resort hotel to Hopewell as per the mayor’s recommendation may prove to be futile.
Finally, even if both towns are comparable and the increase in tourism and tax revenues in Ocean View did result from the new golf course and resort hotel as claimed, the mayor assumes that the increase that occurred during the past two years would occur at the time the addition is made to the town of Hopewell. Perhaps the economic situation would be different from two years ago as in the case of a recession. Then, the number of persons travelling on the whole will reduce. In this case even the town of Ocean view will see a reduction in tourism and tax revenue.
In conclusion, the mayor’s recommendation as it stands now is fundamentally flawed. The three above assumptions need to be thoroughly examined and only then a proper evaluation of the recommendation can be made.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 446 350
No. of Characters: 2052 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.596 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.601 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.589 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.794 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...e town of Ocean View is situated within close proximity to the ocean- where numerous tourists o...
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Line 3, column 634, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ommendation would prove to be unviable. Secondly, the mayor assumes in his memo ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 446.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77578475336 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7491459208 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419282511211 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0985723425 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.105263158 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4736842105 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.513274932499 0.218282227539 235% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16432780099 0.0743258471296 221% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11992225258 0.0701772020484 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299788353966 0.128457276422 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128702158645 0.0628817314937 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.