In preceding argument, the author avers that there is a decline in the movies viewers by citing a study from the marketing department indicate that the quality of movies are very good and depends on these results it should attract myriad segments of people, but the actual status is not met the director expictation and decided to invest more money to marketing the movies. While the argument seems to be quite plausabile at first glance, a closer scrutiny sheds light on a plethora of questions yet to be answered, which could dampen the valuation of the prediction made obove.
To begin with, we do not know how the research was carried out, and wether the results are reliable and if the sample have been representative of large scope. Even though there is a concrete and positive corrolation between invests more money on the movies advertisment and rise the viewer's percentage, this does not necessarily indicate the casual relationsip between the two events. Because there are conditions can be jointly determined by myriad factors including, the types of movies, and the argument indicate a specific type of movies have the attractions from the viewers. Furthermore, the time that displays the movies is it applicable with viewers time, or may be the price of attending these movies very costely because is has high a quality. In order to figure out the true cause of the movies viewers decline, a thorough investigation considering the leverage of all possible contributions is expected.
Last but not least, there is another clue in the report that remain vague and elusive is the author indicate the cause of the decline is the lack of people awarness about the availability of great movies quality, hence, the question here how they conclude the result depends on what, what are the samples types have taken, moreover, the result can be affected by multifarious variances.
In conclusion, increasing the audiences rate by using advertisements do not substantiate the author/'s standpoint in the slightest way, and need to be viewed discreetly.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In preceding argument, the author avers that there is a decline in the movies viewers by citing a study from the marketing department indicate that the quality of movies are very good and depends on these results it should attract myriad segments of people, but the actual status is not met the director expictation and decided to invest more money to marketing the movies.
Error: expictation Suggestion: expectation
Sentence: While the argument seems to be quite plausabile at first glance, a closer scrutiny sheds light on a plethora of questions yet to be answered, which could dampen the valuation of the prediction made obove.
Error: plausabile Suggestion: plausible
Error: obove Suggestion: above
Sentence: To begin with, we do not know how the research was carried out, and wether the results are reliable and if the sample have been representative of large scope.
Error: wether Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Even though there is a concrete and positive corrolation between invests more money on the movies advertisment and rise the viewer's percentage, this does not necessarily indicate the casual relationsip between the two events.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Error: relationsip Suggestion: relations
Error: corrolation Suggestion: correlation
Sentence: Furthermore, the time that displays the movies is it applicable with viewers time, or may be the price of attending these movies very costely because is has high a quality.
Error: costely Suggestion: costly
Sentence: Last but not least, there is another clue in the report that remain vague and elusive is the author indicate the cause of the decline is the lack of people awarness about the availability of great movies quality, hence, the question here how they conclude the result depends on what, what are the samples types have taken, moreover, the result can be affected by multifarious variances.
Error: awarness Suggestion: awareness
flaws:
for GRE argument essays, minimum three arguments wanted.
the arguments are not on the right track. Here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/following-taken-me…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1682 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.962 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.741 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.967 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.652 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Thank you very much, could
Thank you very much, could you please tell me what is my score out of 6 ? and depends on my first trial where is my weakness point? and how can i improve my writing ?
If we put ' ? out of 6 ', it
If we put ' ? out of 6 ', it means the score is pretty low. Your main issues are that you didn't get the point how to argue. The first step is to read essays by other users or read a good GRE book. and get ideas how to argue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'viewers'' or 'viewer's'?
Suggestion: viewers'; viewer's
...on the movies advertisment and rise the viewers percentage, this does not necessarily i...
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tors including, the types of movies, and the argument indicate a specific type of...
^^
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tractions from the viewers. Furthermore, the time that displays the movies is it ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08554572271 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80756851763 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569321533923 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.0666989749 57.8364921388 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 191.555555556 119.503703932 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6666666667 23.324526521 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 5.70786347227 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139100350552 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539933176918 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043847215278 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739916766608 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370024650885 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 14.3799401198 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 48.3550499002 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.197005988 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.32208582834 121% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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