While there may be good intentions of the government to take care of vitamin deficiency in Tagus by promoting a new breed of millet, but it is unlikely that it will lead to any significant improvement.
Government is just assuming that farmers will start farming of new breed as they get subsidy. Will they do it definitely?What is the motivation for them to grow a new breed? Why will they leave traditional crop as they are more used to it? It might be possible that farmers don't have initial money to buy the costly seeds eventhough they receive subsidy afterwards.
Even if farmers are willing to grow new seeds, What's the arrangement for transition in terms of proper training. Does this new breed require new style of farming or any extra care? Every crop has different requirements. Who will tell these things to farmers? There must be a proper training facilities provided.
Suppose that farmers start growing this new breed, then what's the guarantee that people will replace their traditional food with this new one? It depends upon their tastes also. What if they are not aware and cautious with their health? It's unlikely that people do not have any other source of Vitamin A. It might be the case that people are just negligent about their health. They might be eating junk and not health conscious. It might be that case that government requires a mass campaign for health awareness than a costly breed of millet.
Since it will be a new crop, is it tested fully for its side effects? Things which give too much benefits should always be doubted first and should be checked rigorously. Has the government ensured proper testing? Does the government have any other motive than health behind this crop? This new crop's seeds might be manufactured by some company closely associated with ruling government. Government needs to come forward with a proper testing report and its proper intentions to prove credibility of crop.
Even if they are willing to adopt new food, what's will be the cost of new food? Will it be expensive or affordable? Its seeds are already costly so there are chances that food might be costly too. Government needs to present proper price tags so that people can make an informed decision.
It is beyond doubt that people require Vitamin A to improve their health. This new breed might be beneficial too but government needs to answer above questions and justify its position before accepting this new breed. Just accepting a new breed without its pros and cons might be dangerous and its proper evaluation needs to be done.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82954545455 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49626891001 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481818181818 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 4.0 0.471057884232 849% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4159947972 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.8333333333 119.503703932 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.6666666667 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.4 5.70786347227 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216746040493 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636466062221 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618121080319 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134584461255 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476189901735 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 14.3799401198 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.3550499002 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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