Firstly, the survey conducted by Dr. Field 20 years earlier might not correct as there is no evidance how he conducted his survey but only author says field just observed the island. The author did not mention the number of Tertia people who perticipated in that survay. Also, there are no evidance that the all the children were reared by entire village, may be the children who was rising up by the villagers their parents are dead, may be their parents are abandanted their some children for some prejudicision. May be they thought that it was the best way to rise because, by this way they will learn the best how to cope with the environment. We don't know about them so much as Dr. Field didn't mention a lot.
In the latter part the author says his observation is right as he find out the children talks about about their biological parents. There is a clear cut difference between talks and rise up be their parents. Still that island, children are reared by villagers, not by their parents. Besides, there is no indication about the interview such as the number of people they interviewed. In some point of view, the methodologies adopted by Dr. Karp is questionable, such as, why he and his group didn't interviewed the local villagers.
by those things i thing this argument is weak and need for information to evaluate this arguemnt.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 516, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...r some children for some prejudicision. May be they thought that it was the best way t...
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Suggestion:
...much as Dr. Field didnt mention a lot. In the latter part the author says his o...
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Suggestion: finds
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1114.0 2260.96107784 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 237.0 441.139720559 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70042194093 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.56307096286 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57488392733 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540084388186 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 705.55239521 47% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4983751649 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.272727273 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5454545455 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134703054371 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504415442021 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401128659488 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766602783805 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437097532412 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 98.500998004 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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