An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In the above argument, the author states that, an international development organization, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A to overcome the deficiency of vitamin A in the citizen of tagus. He also state that seeds for this new type of millet cost more and for this farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. The above argument seems logical and coherent but there are some factors that would lead to the failure of the project.
First, the new breed of millet high is vitamin A is not tested in the masses, it may be possible this millet has some adverse effect on the health of people, and there is one more possibility that the millet is not accepted by the majority may be because of his taste so producing millet in a large amount without testing is not a good idea.
Second, government is providing subsidy for the high cost millet, but author do not mention about the training or the knowledge provided to the farmer regarding the sowing, plowing and cultivation of this new seed, at this condition it may be possible that they use there older technique of farming and will not get the proper result as author state that this seed is new for farmers.
Third, every seed leave effects on the soil and some are having severe adverse effect, author does not state that this particular seed has no adverse effect in soil, and farmer can sowed there regular seed after the cultivation of this seed. If this crop is having adverse effect then this will be a great loss for the farmer, because poor quality soil does not produce a high quality crop.
In conclusion, considering all the factors more information must be required to warrant the action of the international development organization. If the project is accepted by the mass population then only it is accepted, for this a survey is organised by the government and the other factors also be taken into consideration and if the people are ready to accept this seen then proper training should be provided to the farmer.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1640 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.581 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.468 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.008 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.748 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...is new type of millet cost more and for this farmers will be paid subsidies for farm...
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Line 8, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l does not produce a high quality crop. In conclusion, considering all the facto...
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Line 10, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be required to warrant the action of the international development organization. ...
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Line 10, column 371, Rule ID: SCENE_SEEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'scene'?
Suggestion: scene
... if the people are ready to accept this seen then proper training should be provided...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, third, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71229050279 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52880320834 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472067039106 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.6244565388 57.8364921388 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 187.444444444 119.503703932 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.7777777778 23.324526521 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472746942704 0.218282227539 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202610946378 0.0743258471296 273% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143260296995 0.0701772020484 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266395940857 0.128457276422 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145679862369 0.0628817314937 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 14.3799401198 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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