An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

Submitted by Blem1941 on Mon, 08/14/2017 - 16:18

The following are the questions that arises due to incompleteness of the provided argument.

It would have been better if the argument stated the effectiveness of the newly engineered millet. The whole discussion is mostly based on the efficacy of the product. Only if it can really improve the state of Tagus the government of Tagus will have to invest on promoting the millet.

Subsidy alone cannot promote the farmers to grow a new crop. The demand for the millet and market conditions and feasibility to sell it in the market also plays a key role in farmers decision to grow this crop. If demand and profit margin is high farmer will be promoted to grow the crop.

The fact that a millet is already a staple food in Tagus will not imply that the newly engineered millet will be readily accepted by the people of Tagus. The current millet selected as a staple will mostly full-fill the energy needs of the people and it may have lot of healthy benefits and be available for a low cost. The newly developed millet may not have a similar advantage as the current millet. Its important to consider other factors about the new millet apart from the fact that it can help in improving condition of Tagus by decreasing vitamin A deficiency.

Hence lot of factors have to be considered by the government before it can start promoting the new type of millet.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 321, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nefits and be available for a low cost. The newly developed millet may not have a s...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... by decreasing vitamin A deficiency. Hence lot of factors have to be considered by...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, may, really, so, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1128.0 2260.96107784 50% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 241.0 441.139720559 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68049792531 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.56307096286 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53240563244 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 204.123752495 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489626556017 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 705.55239521 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.625260712 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334596543973 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117309819414 0.0743258471296 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658975227828 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150516777817 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099609893741 0.0628817314937 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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