While the argument provides advantages of an unmanned space mission over a manned one, it fails to address some rather important assumptions that shaped its conclusion overall.
To start with, it is rather stated that manned space flight is dangerous, while there is an obvious life of the astronaut which is prone to a risk, there is nothing evident in the argument which adds to the point.Also, if the organisation is about to build and execute a manned space flight, it is deemed to take extra precautions after which the argument's contention with the dangers of such manned space flight may seem a bit impertinent.
Further, there are several instances of an unmanned space mission resulting in failure and crashing and therefore unmanned space flight is not foolproof either.
Further, when the success of unmanned space flight is talked about, it is assumed that this success is because of it being unmanned, where as there can be other reasons for instance, the recent space flights may be to a more clear and taken paths which do not require any person as such to rely upon in its cruise.On the other hand, accompanied with a skilled and maven astronaut might aid the mission to less taken paths and help us in the expedition.
In the same context, it says they have acquired many useful information,nevertheless they may be useful to some extent, combining them with an human presence might increase their usefulness and reliance giving us more return on the investment made in terms of the cost. Additionally, it can be more beneficial in terms of a global front and a matter of pride for that nation if it can send a person to space. All these notions are overlooked in the argument in suggesting investing the resources in unmanned space flight alone.
Finally,It might be seemingly obvious to get convinced with the conclusion in investing in unmanned mission, however these are some unwarranted assumptions which need to addressed.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.777 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.582 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.202 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.447 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.782 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...in the argument which adds to the point.Also, if the organisation is about to build ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
... take extra precautions after which the arguments contention with the dangers of such man...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 134, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...uccess is because of it being unmanned, where as there can be other reasons for instance...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...rson as such to rely upon in its cruise.On the other hand, accompanied with a skil...
^^
Line 8, column 49, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much useful information', 'a good deal of useful information'.
Suggestion: much useful information; a good deal of useful information
...ame context, it says they have acquired many useful information,nevertheless they may be useful to some...
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Line 8, column 72, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , nevertheless
...ey have acquired many useful information,nevertheless they may be useful to some extent, comb...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 141, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ful to some extent, combining them with an human presence might increase their use...
^^
Line 10, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , It
... unmanned space flight alone. Finally,It might be seemingly obvious to get convi...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, for instance, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 328.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97256097561 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84174963229 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 22.8473053892 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 125.073915646 57.8364921388 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 203.875 119.503703932 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.0 23.324526521 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.125 5.70786347227 265% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307239450042 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131900271401 0.0743258471296 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450217672927 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148460366597 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555047110432 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 14.3799401198 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.86 48.3550499002 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 12.197005988 158% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.4 11.1389221557 165% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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