The author of the argument purportedly highlights that decrease in fitness level causes the recent decline in the economy. However, the premises upon which he puts his claim are fallacious and vulnerable to argue in several reasons. For the support of which some critical yet ignored questions need to be addressed.
To commence with, the author content and compare that current decreasing physical fitness in Corpora's citizens and fitness level was met 50 % of citizens twenty years ago. The time passed twenty years and populations are changed. It might be more older generations than young generations who are actively involve physical activity. Comparing data from two decades ago to current situation is not accurate and absurd. To convince this statement, author needs to provide up to date datas, specific population studies, otherwise this statement will not be considerable.
Second of all, author initially claimed using numerous time on computer causing low fitness level, but later he concluded high ownership of computer represents high fitness level overall. This statement is not convincing and again not specific to believe due to lack of evidences and studies. To make it believe, author needs provide how and who does using computers and what specific area is . For example, if they study it in Silicon Valley, it could be reliable because most young generation in this specific area work at IT or other computer related jobs. However, we don't know they can or can't physically fit due to using computers or not. This statement need to provide more detailed information to believe it.
Last, author assumes that causes of low expenditure on fitness related products is recent decline in economy and he believes fitness level will improve if the economy in Corpora city . From this short statement, we can not conclude the decline in economy is the only reason in low expenditure on fitness products. It needs to specify to convince this statement and provide specific data. Aging population relatively does't require to purchase fitness products or they already have it ,or this Corpora city has lots of outdoor activities available such as hiking, cycling or walking in parks that are not require fitness products. Again, it it not convincing that only purchasing power of fitness product attributes the decline in economy. This statement needs to improve to believe the relationship between economy and expenditure of fitness products.
Overall, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it the author must provide clear evidence that relationship between change of economy and fitness level.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2163 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.138 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.639 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.136 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.4 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hysical fitness in Corporas citizens and fitness level was met 50 % of citizens t...
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... met 50 % of citizens twenty years ago. The time passed twenty years and populat...
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Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...d populations are changed. It might be more older generations than young generations who ...
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Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
...than young generations who are actively involve physical activity. Comparing data fro...
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Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...are actively involve physical activity. Comparing data from two decades ago to c...
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Line 5, column 395, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...sing computers and what specific area is . For example, if they study it in Silic...
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Line 5, column 577, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...her computer related jobs. However, we dont know they can or cant physically fit du...
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Line 5, column 599, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...obs. However, we dont know they can or cant physically fit due to using computers o...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecent decline in economy and he believes fitness level will improve if the econom...
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Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...l improve if the economy in Corpora city . From this short statement, we can not ...
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Line 7, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in low expenditure on fitness products. It needs to specify to convince this sta...
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Line 7, column 393, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is statement and provide specific data. Aging population relatively doest requir...
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Line 7, column 437, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'purchasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: purchasing
...ing population relatively doest require to purchase fitness products or they already have ...
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Line 7, column 465, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...est require to purchase fitness products or they already have it ,or this Corpora...
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Line 7, column 490, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...itness products or they already have it ,or this Corpora city has lots of outdoor...
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Line 7, column 611, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...ycling or walking in parks that are not require fitness products. Again, it it not c...
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Line 7, column 637, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that are not require fitness products. Again, it it not convincing that only pu...
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Line 7, column 647, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: it
...not require fitness products. Again, it it not convincing that only purchasing pow...
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Line 7, column 749, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...duct attributes the decline in economy. This statement needs to improve to belie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, then, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28878281623 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68787239774 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501193317422 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4800899346 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.727272727 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0676099068428 0.218282227539 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0231832394135 0.0743258471296 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445571857826 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.040515274727 0.128457276422 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521624912412 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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