QT 1.
While it might be true that health naturally has had there most profitable stores in areas where residents who are highly concerned with leading healthy lives, to conclude that plainsville is simillar town by the vice president of the company does not acoount for all the facts and factors that should be considered prior to setting up the new store in Plainsville.
It is stated that the sales for running shoes and excersise equipment is at all time high. However, it is not mentioned by how much has the sales incresed from. The initial data on the sales is not mentioned thus it cannot be determined accurately if the demand is at all time high, as the metric for its judgement is not clear. Moreover, the time frame for the report is not clear, maybe its reported at begining of the year where people do make new year resolutions however if people continued being healthy by excesising is unclear and therefore sales are high in that period.
Additionally the local health club's increase in the members cannot be quantified as residents of plainsville being healthier. The increase can be attributted to number of things like reduction of membership fees, flexibility of timings, new improved amenties, increase in the population of the town which explains new memberships at the health club thereby increase in number of members. This explains that the increase in the health club members cannot be a reasonable factor in deciding to set up new stores in plainsville.
The school children cannot be considered as a strong demographic consumers as its not made clear how many schools are there in plainsville and is it compulsory to participate in all those schools, the school children might already have the required shoes and equipment or as its compulsory, the schools may choose to provide them to their students thereby not requiring them to buy new shoes or equipment from health naturally.
Therefore,health naturally opening new stores in plainsville based on these factors alone does not accurately determine the success of the new store and lead to the chain incuring unncessary losses.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1731 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.89 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.687 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.931 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.38 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...us it cannot be determined accurately if the demand is at all time high, as the m...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...erefore sales are high in that period. Additionally the local health clubs increase in the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'consumer'?
Suggestion: consumer
...t be considered as a strong demographic consumers as its not made clear how many schools ...
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Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , health
...ipment from health naturally. Therefore,health naturally opening new stores in plainsv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00283286119 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79138762819 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504249291785 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.311292764 57.8364921388 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.6 119.503703932 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.3 23.324526521 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243953926651 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922750866666 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869442979716 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150317954666 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843229507722 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.3550499002 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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