Nature’s Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature’s Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville’s schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age
The writer of this analytical piece has drawn an optimistic conclusion from, from disjointed and incomplete data, that Nature's Way will be successful in the town of Plainsville. In the support of his position, the writer mentioned that Plainsvilles' people live a healthy life so they will use the product of Nature's Way. At first glance, the writer's conclusion seems plausible, but in the depth analysis reveals certain logical fallacies.
The major lacuna in the given argument is the unjustified assumption that there are no other health-related stores in Plainsville. It's likely that Plainsville already has famous health-related stores. If the products of the other stores are meeting the people's expectations at quality and price over Nature's Way, then maybe no one will go to Nature's Way. Therefore, the writer's optimistic conclusion regarding Nature's Way success will fall-apart. Moreover, the writer assumes that the residents of Plainsville live a healthy life based on the selling of sports shoes and clothes. At the same time, it's highly probable that people's purchased products for some sports events and not for daily use. It's also possible that due to certain sales or discount peoples were attracted to buy these products. Consequently, if it's true then it will diminish the writer's assumption regarding the resident's healthy lifestyle and Nature's Way success. The writer didn't mention the purchasing power of the Plainsville people because it's necessary to evaluate that peoples have enough income to buy health-related products. Hence, if the peoples didn't earn enough to spend on the health-related products then Nature's Way will prove to be unsuccessful.
Furthermore, the writer unfairly assumes that people of the Plainsville are more concerned about their health as most of the weight training and aerobics classes are always remains full. There may be only a few classes for the aerobic because there are no demands for such classes among the Plainsville people. Hence, as the classes are few it's naturally that it remains full. Therefore, attendance in the aerobics and health-related classes doesn't lead to conclude that people are more concerned about their health in Plainsville. Moreover, the writer mentioned that the local health club has more members than ever. Here, the major gap is the unstated assumption that peoples going to a health club will use the product of the Plainsville. It's highly probable that peoples are going to the local health club just to do a simple exercise to be fit or maybe to get some relaxation. Consequently, maybe peoples aren't using the health-related products which Nature's Way will be going to offer. Also, the writer became pollyannish about the future success of Nature's Way while mentioning that schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program. Here, it would be unreasonable to assume that all children will adopt a healthy lifestyle as the program suggest and use healthy products. It's highly probable that children will eventually forget about the learning and never follow the lesson they learned about a healthy lifestyle. Therefore, the writer's prediction about the future customer proves unwarranted.
All things considering, it may be said that the writer failed to provide a convincing argument because of the complete absence of the evidence required for his assumption. The writer needs to bolster the argument with information related to other health-related stores and the total number of people attending the gym and aerobics. Moreover, there is a requirement of evidence that can prove that most of the Plainsville people are purchasing health-related products. But, no convincing reasoning is given. The argument ends with an entirely unjustified optimistic conclusion based on wishy-washy observations that are likely to incorrect.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 607 350
No. of Characters: 3208 1500
No. of Different Words: 249 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.964 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.285 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.919 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 246 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 193 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 142 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 85 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.233 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.026 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.633 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.428 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ct of Natures Way. At first glance, the writers conclusion seems plausible, but in the ...
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Line 3, column 851, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
..., if its true then it will diminish the writers assumption regarding the residents heal...
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Line 3, column 948, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...yle and Natures Way success. The writer didnt mention the purchasing power of the Pla...
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Line 3, column 1129, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...related products. Hence, if the peoples didnt earn enough to spend on the health-rela...
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Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...e people. Hence, as the classes are few its naturally that it remains full. Therefo...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...the aerobics and health-related classes doesnt lead to conclude that people are more c...
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Line 5, column 911, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...relaxation. Consequently, maybe peoples arent using the health-related products which...
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Line 5, column 1463, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...out a healthy lifestyle. Therefore, the writers prediction about the future customer pr...
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Line 5, column 1528, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the future customer proves unwarranted. All things considering, it may be said t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3249.0 2260.96107784 144% => OK
No of words: 603.0 441.139720559 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38805970149 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9554069778 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96811934268 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419568822554 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1000.8 705.55239521 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0161867332 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.3 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303082700233 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939999525287 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703078261281 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198908111797 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067187881345 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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