This argument shows that the company denies their role in the recent event where pets have gotten ill after eating the pet food provided by pet company. Though the company has already tested the food samples and do not want to spend more time on this issue, I believe that company should be concerned about their reputation in market and the safety of their consumers. In order to do so, I think more detailed measures must be placed before closing the investigation.
Firstly, the location. This might be the key to find out that what is the real cause of food illness in pets. If the call received from pet owners are mostly from a certain district or area then there are chances of food contamination from other sources. For example; if a large delivery of pet food to a particular district got delivered in unexpected circumstances where food might be rotten or gone bad inside the packing. Though these events are generally noticable but sometimes shoppers might overlook the packing and buy the product. Water can be a big reason of contamination. So company should find out if there are cases of food-poising in human also in that area. If so this could lead to find out the more suitable reasons.
Secondly, the time period of complaints. If mostly calls came at the same time period then there is a reason that some batch of pet food might be contaminated. However, if the complaints vary among different time period then other reasons might be required to justify that correct reason of pet-illness.
Third, company should backtrack all the call received for pet-illness case and ask more questions to the pet owners about the daily schedule of their pet. There might be chances that the pet was already ill before eating the food or pets have eaten something else after which they fall ill. Once we know the accurate information about this incident, we can conclude further about the real reason.
Company should also conduct a audit from reputable firm, this can help the pet company to regain the lost reputation in their customers. This can also states that company itself is very serious for such concerns and doing everything to keep safe their consumers. In the end, I would say company should try find join every piece if info.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Though these events are generally noticable but sometimes shoppers might overlook the packing and buy the product.
Error: noticable Suggestion: noticeable
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK.
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other arguments like:
1. the samples should be big enough
2. were these chemicals found within safe proportions for consumption for pets?
3. it could be other factors inducing the symptoms of sickness. For example, it could be that the food becomes bad for ingestion after being mixed with external agents such as water or other food supplements.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1822 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.672 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.374 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.632 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 676, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ood-poising in human also in that area. If so this could lead to find out the more...
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Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...econdly, the time period of complaints. If mostly calls came at the same time peri...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fy that correct reason of pet-illness. Third, company should backtrack all the ...
^^^
Line 10, column 29, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eason. Company should also conduct a audit from reputable firm, this can hel...
^
Line 10, column 152, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'state'
Suggestion: state
...ation in their customers. This can also states that company itself is very serious for...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81025641026 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46169337119 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520512820513 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.084923277 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349235144641 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104151802642 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996900730173 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207550505612 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588111952258 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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