Argument states that Pirouettes Ballet School is a clear choice for any child because they have talented teaching staff and many students have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies. While on the surface the logical flow seems cohesive, there remains some questions to be answered to fill the loopholes and assumptions made by the argument.
Argument states that it provides the most intensive program to their student. But an intensive programs is not correlated to a efficient program. It is totally possible, that a slightly less intensive program might be able to create more professionally deft dancers. An intensive program inherently needs talented students who can keep up with the rigorous routine. Not every child might be able to keep up with the intensive program, hence saying school is clear choice for any child is too far fetched. For example intensive training one gets to become marine, or special commando is too rigorous to give it to a normal soldier. It might even be harmful to the person getting intensive training. As in the cases of ballet dancing, the student might get her too bad that he or she might not be able to pursue a professional career in dancing. It might be more efficient to design a program calibrated towards an individual's strengths and weakness. It will allow student to learn at his or her own pace and they will be more satisfied with their routines. At the least, argument should provide the proof that most of the students can keep up with intensity of the program.
In addition to above, teachers from most prestigious dance companies does not ascertain their teaching quality. It is a sure proof that these teachers are, themselves, good dancers. But it falls short of proving their mentorship. Many a times we can see that genius people in their respective field are not so great in teaching. Moreover, they have to be able to put up with children. Teaching children something is a monumental task. Teachers must have a patience, and must reiterate the concept many times before a student gets it. Hence, the argument should also provide the information about the age of student being enrolled in the programs. As smaller children tend to require more specific attention than the older ones, when learning a new concept like a dance move, a difficult ballet stance, or just how to present in front of an audience.
Finally, there is arrant lack of numbers which might have bolstered the claim of the argument that Pirouettes Ballet School is the school of choice. The arguments falls short of telling how many teachers have danced in those prestigious ballet companies. Also, it does not tell how many of their students have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies. Author uses vague terms like "most" and "many" in these cases. This vagueness in argument gives rise to question. It is not stated the number of students who went to become dancers were enrolled in the school from the very childhood. Argument might have also told about the students if they went to some other ballet school after Pirouettes Ballet School. These scenarios might have skewed results presented by argument. It might have been possible student with already some knowledge about ballet would have gotten better results from Pirouettes than the ones who started ballet at the same. In this case, it makes little sense to start the ballet training at the Pirouettes.
In conclusion, after examining and analysing these points it becomes clear that the argument needs to answer these logical fallacies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...intensive programs is not correlated to a efficient program. It is totally possib...
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Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
...short of proving their mentorship. Many a times we can see that genius people in their ...
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Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'fall'.
Suggestion: fall
... is the school of choice. The arguments falls short of telling how many teachers have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3006.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 599.0 441.139720559 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0183639399 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6261044306 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459098497496 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 917.1 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 19.7664670659 167% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9461988961 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0909090909 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1515151515 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75757575758 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34398045507 0.218282227539 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873091132351 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867425033573 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183848696339 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102524952358 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 98.500998004 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.