Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
In the context, the author claims that Pirouettes Ballet school is the number one choice for any child. Delineated in this way, the author fails to point out several cardinal factors on which the argument can be exempted. Despite he posits to supplemental his logic behind the conclusion that it has the most severe program among the Elmtown schools & some of the teachers danced in honorary ballet companies over the world, intensive scrutiny view of this evidence reveals that there is an abundance of loopholes laying into that reasons which made the argument unwarranted. Therefore the argument need to be more analytic & currently can be considered as unsubstantiated.
While the the author stated that The school has the most intensive program among the Elmtown schools, he did not provide specific reason for that. He did not clarified his point on which point of view it has the most severe program & what is plan of that program or how they are being implicated on the child. Besides this, he also didnot mention here how the Pirouettes Ballet school & other school of Elmtown are being compared. Like this can be happened that they are being compared on just base of one program or by just asking the people who are biased to Pirouettes Ballet school. So giving any decision about which have the best program a proper survey is needed. Hence, this assumptions of author have not any solid basement by which it can be judged.
Another fact is that, the author stated the there are number of teacher who danced in so many prestigious ballet company but this fact does not make any correlation among the assumption and the conclusion. For example, what if the the dancer who are good at dance but not good at teaching the dance? Like there is no warranty that a good dancer have to be a good dance teacher. It can justified if the students of that school vote for the teachers that they are good at teaching. So if the author had provided this kind of survey this fact can be considered.
Finally, the author jut states here a random number "many of our students" which did not mention any specific number sense. Like it can be five or it can hundred & five. What if there are only ten students and five of them have gone on top dance companies? Then this number will only create a vague evidence. Another thing is author merely said this is the prime choice for any child without having a look on the other facility. What if the price of the school is high or what if the other educational facility of that school is not up to the mark? This information must be known before giving any conclusion. Without convincing answers to this questions, the reader is left with the impression that the author is quite indolent to find out the hole of his proofs.
In summary, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To buttress it further, the author must provide concrete evidence, perhaps by the way of a reliable survey analysis of the comparison of the program among the Elmtown schools. Finally to better asses the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about school facility rather then only dance standard.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 549 350
No. of Characters: 2537 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.841 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.621 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.363 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.115 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.764 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.654 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.481 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ere program among the Elmtown schools & some of the teachers danced in honorary ballet comp...
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Line 1, column 577, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ns which made the argument unwarranted. Therefore the argument need to be more analytic &...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...nsidered as unsubstantiated. While the the author stated that The school has the m...
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Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...nsidered as unsubstantiated. While the the author stated that The school has the m...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'clarify'
Suggestion: clarify
...de specific reason for that. He did not clarified his point on which point of view it has...
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Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'pirouette'.
Suggestion: Pirouette
...ust asking the people who are biased to Pirouettes Ballet school. So giving any decision a...
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Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ogram a proper survey is needed. Hence, this assumptions of author have not any soli...
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Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...nd the conclusion. For example, what if the the dancer who are good at dance but not go...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...nd the conclusion. For example, what if the the dancer who are good at dance but not go...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 386, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'justify'
Suggestion: justify
...have to be a good dance teacher. It can justified if the students of that school vote for...
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Line 9, column 481, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eachers that they are good at teaching. So if the author had provided this kind of su...
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Line 13, column 36, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Finally, the author jut states here a random number 'many of our studen...
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Line 13, column 166, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...er sense. Like it can be five or it can hundred & five. What if there are only ten stud...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 530, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f the other educational facility of that school is not up to the mark? This infor...
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Line 13, column 653, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nclusion. Without convincing answers to this questions, the reader is left with the ...
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Line 17, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ole of his proofs. In summary, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
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Line 17, column 240, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... the program among the Elmtown schools. Finally to better asses the argument, it would ...
^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 354, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...nformation about school facility rather then only dance standard.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, hence, if, look, so, then, therefore, while, another thing, for example, in summary, kind of, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2617.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 549.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76684881603 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49636900884 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437158469945 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8739725379 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.653846154 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1153846154 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11538461538 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316352869421 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887207739049 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748376911863 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179361700037 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631154988761 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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