I do not completely agree with the statement given that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child as the facts given to make this statement valid are not complete.
First of all it is stated that of all the dance schools, Ballet school has the most intensive program. Well, this statement is not complete. Intensive in what aspect? How did the school measure this intensive factor? What was the fraction of students who were enrolled could complete the program and go on to become professional dancers? What was the drop out rate of students from this dance program? Did the students feel motivated enough and were satisfied with the program?
All these questions remain unanswered.
Secondly, it is stated that the teachers of Ballet School have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Well, this is a good factor in bringing and attracting the students to join the school as the teachers themselves are achievers but this does not guarantee that a teacher who was successful in her own career might be able to make the students that successful. The success of students is dependent on many factors what is the environment of learning how well the students compete within themselves and so on.
The third statement being that most of the students have become professional dancers with top dance companies . Again this statement is not complete what was the fraction of students who enrolled in this program and out of those students how many were able to successfully complete the program and become professional dancers? Did the school fire or removed the students who were not able to perform well so that their numbers always show a positive side? Did the Ballet school have any tie-ups with these top dance companies and restricting the other schools to create this image.
Thus there needs to complete analysis of these aspects before the Ballet school categorizes itself as the clear choice for any child.
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- Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child Of all the dance schools in Elmtown Pirouettes has the most intensive program and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world Many of our students have 70
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1601 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.852 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.475 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.976 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ssional dancers with top dance companies . Again this statement is not complete wh...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... other schools to create this image. Thus there needs to complete analysis of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, secondly, so, third, thus, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97575757576 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52821538254 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442424242424 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 62.1032180211 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5882352941 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408358152816 0.218282227539 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146751875466 0.0743258471296 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142997839229 0.0701772020484 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20819255992 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705326184544 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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