A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
In the argument, the author concludes that the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.To support the argument, the author points out that a recent study shows that the consumpton of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the pase five years and no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. The author also cits that two-income families will like the seafood dishes. However, colse scrutiny of the argument reveals that it is unconvincing in several aspects.
First and foremost, the author assumes that the two studies in the arugment are reliable. However, the author fails to prove that the respones are accurate and the respondents are statistically significant in number. What's more whether the sample is representative enough to reflect the overall attitude deserves to doubtes.Lacking the evidence of survey's relability, the author cannot reach to this assumption.
In addition, the author assues that the national trend about the two-income families will equally applied to Bay City. It is possible that the trend in Bay City is totally opposite. More information should be provide to better bolster the assumption.Moreover, the author assumes that there are no restaurants provide the seafood now and future. However, there may be some restaurants which is going to open or will be open in the future.
Moreover, the author assumes that two-income families who eat signifcantly fewer home-cooked meals and more concern about healthful eating will like seafood dishes. However, eat more healther do not neccessarily mean that they will eat seafood, since there are many other choice about the healtier food other than seafood, such as, the fruite, vegetable, eggs, milk and so on.
Finally, the author assumes that the restaurant will profit. profit is a funciton of cost and revenue. It is possible that the cost of the restaurant will be quite high and hard to get a profit.
In sum, the argument are not based on valid evidenc or sound reasoning, either of which are indespensable of a conclusive argument. To better strenghten the argument, the author should cite more evidence and reason more convincingly and take every possibilities into consideration.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the argument, the author concludes that the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.To support the argument, the author points out that a recent study shows that the consumpton of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the pase five years and no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood.
Error: consumpton Suggestion: consumption
Error: pase Suggestion: pass
Sentence: The author also cits that two-income families will like the seafood dishes.
Error: cits Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, colse scrutiny of the argument reveals that it is unconvincing in several aspects.
Error: colse Suggestion: close
Sentence: First and foremost, the author assumes that the two studies in the arugment are reliable.
Error: arugment Suggestion: argument
Sentence: However, the author fails to prove that the respones are accurate and the respondents are statistically significant in number.
Error: respones Suggestion: response
Sentence: What's more whether the sample is representative enough to reflect the overall attitude deserves to doubtes.Lacking the evidence of survey's relability, the author cannot reach to this assumption.
Error: doubtes Suggestion: doubted
Error: relability Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addition, the author assues that the national trend about the two-income families will equally applied to Bay City.
Error: assues Suggestion: asses
Sentence: Moreover, the author assumes that two-income families who eat signifcantly fewer home-cooked meals and more concern about healthful eating will like seafood dishes.
Error: signifcantly Suggestion: significantly
Sentence: However, eat more healther do not neccessarily mean that they will eat seafood, since there are many other choice about the healtier food other than seafood, such as, the fruite, vegetable, eggs, milk and so on.
Error: healther Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: healtier Suggestion: healthier
Error: fruite Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: neccessarily Suggestion: necessarily
Sentence: Finally, the author assumes that the restaurant will profit. profit is a funciton of cost and revenue.
Error: funciton Suggestion: function
Sentence: In sum, the argument are not based on valid evidenc or sound reasoning, either of which are indespensable of a conclusive argument.
Error: evidenc Suggestion: evidence
Error: indespensable Suggestion: indispensable
Sentence: To better strenghten the argument, the author should cite more evidence and reason more convincingly and take every possibilities into consideration.
Error: strenghten Suggestion: strengthen
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argument 1 -- not OK. In GRE, we have to accept all data or evidence are true. It is important to find out loopholes behind surveys or studies. for this:
A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood.
we may argue like:
maybe people like to eat sea foods beside other foods.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
argument 4 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1877 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.128 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.434 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.647 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
... should be quite popular and profitable.To support the argument, the author points...
^^
Line 4, column 195, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: significant
...e and the respondents are statistically significant in number. Whats more whether the sample is repre...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 218, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...re statistically significant in number. Whats more whether the sample is representati...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 325, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Lacking
...he overall attitude deserves to doubtes.Lacking the evidence of surveys relability, the...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 99, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'apply'
Suggestion: apply
...ut the two-income families will equally applied to Bay City. It is possible that the tr...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 210, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provided'?
Suggestion: provided
...ly opposite. More information should be provide to better bolster the assumption.Moreov...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 251, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...rovide to better bolster the assumption.Moreover, the author assumes that there are no r...
^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 62, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Profit
...ssumes that the restaurant will profit. profit is a funciton of cost and revenue. It i...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34986225895 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93872129368 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504132231405 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.6092649613 57.8364921388 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.235294118 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255781600938 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696703440838 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11860304234 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121201992136 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145243144207 0.0628817314937 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.