A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
Author states that according to a recent study, it was found that children living in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower level of tooth decay than children living in suburban area in the Unites States. Even though they visit dentist more often than a child in Himalayan region, tooth decaying is more in United States. So, author states that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay, which In feel is wrong.
Author have considered only geographical location to evaluate if dental care is required or not. He have definitely ignored other valuable aspects which could be the reason. People living in Himalayan region has access to more natural resources like fruits and vegetables. They consume fresh organic food. Whereas, people in the United States live more on inorganic food. They do not have access to natural resources like one in Nepal. Consumption of fresh food would results in less tooth decay. Since, United States people consume more of processed and frozen food, they tend to decayed tooth.
Consumption of non-vegetarian to vegetarian food also counts in tooth decay. Himalayan people have access to more of vegetarian food from the mountains. Whereas, in the United States, they do not have this privilege, instead they have to depend on non-vegetarian food as there is scarcity of vegetarian food. Climate also plays a vital role as people in US live at very less temperature, to counter that they have to eat more non vegetarian food.
These non vegetarian food, gets struck between teeth and results in decay. People of Himalayas eat vegetarian food which does not struck much like non-vegetarian food. One reason author has missed is that, people in Nepal uses natural herbal sticks to brush their teeth whereas people in US used tooth paste which are not natural. Author should have considered these aspects before extrapolating that dental care is not helpful i preventing tooth decay.
It is other way round, people in US should go for dental care more often. They need more attention than people living in Himalayan region. One big reason is for healthy tooth in Himalayan region is that, most of medicine and ayruvedic come from Himalayas. So these ingredients are already there in their consumption which US people lack.
Hence, I would like to say that Author could have substantiated its inference with more research. There are various reason for the healthy and self healing tooth of Himalayan region children than children living in suburban area of the United States.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: has
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
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Suggestion:
...rozen food, they tend to decayed tooth. Consumption of non-vegetarian to vegetar...
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Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'whereas']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.294117647059 0.25644967241 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.159041394336 0.15541462614 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113289760349 0.0836205057962 135% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0522875816993 0.0520304965353 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0326797385621 0.0272364105082 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.143790849673 0.125424944231 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0392156862745 0.0416121511921 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.49851035036 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0261437908497 0.026700313972 98% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.041394335512 0.113004496875 37% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0130718954248 0.0255425247493 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0108932461874 0.0127820249294 85% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2540.0 2731.13054187 93% => OK
No of words: 418.0 446.07635468 94% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07655502392 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397129186603 0.378187486979 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.222488038278 0.287650121315 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.143540669856 0.208842608468 69% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102870813397 0.135150697306 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49851035036 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 207.018472906 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437799043062 0.469332199767 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.0540256265 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 16.72 23.2022227129 72% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0266370573 57.7814097925 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 141.986410481 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.72 23.2022227129 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.2 0.724660767414 28% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 38.9688038278 51.9672348444 75% => OK
Elegance: 1.95535714286 1.8405768891 106% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.491991028014 0.441005458295 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.125700059969 0.135418324435 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103817858647 0.0829849096947 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.5177822227 0.58762219726 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141846184254 0.147661913831 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176544728884 0.193483328276 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148836320902 0.0970749176394 153% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.343336588074 0.42659136922 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0779676510348 0.0774707102158 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332788786834 0.312017818177 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149894934918 0.0698173142475 215% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.33743842365 180% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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