A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they “frequently” had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20 percent also reported that they had felt “sad, down, or blue” at least three times within the past month.
These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked to depression and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.
Over the years, different people have come up with a host of factors and behaviors that contribute to depression. The author of this argument has concluded that depression is caused by excessively spending time online. The author lists statistics gathered from their survey which showed a correlation between excess time spent online and difficulty concentrating. Also, the statistic of: 20 percent of these adults who participated in the survey and reported excessive online use reported feeling sad or blue, was given in support of the overall argument. While this author may have some valid points, the lack of sufficient, detailed, and relevant evidence greatly weakens their argument.
In adults, difficulty concentrating can be caused by a number of different factors. While this is a symptom of depression, it is not exclusively related to depression. It is possible that some people naturally have a shorter attention span than others, which would cause them to have difficulty while concentrating. Also, this statement does not take into account extraneous factors. For example, a person may have trouble concentrating because they are nervous, excited, or upset about an upcoming event.This difficulty in concentrating,in this case, could be temporary and not related or indicative of depression.
Similar to the previous evidence, the second statistic is vague at best.The author does not note the person’s overall demeanor or general mood. It is possible that some of those in the 20 percent already have depression. In this case, their depression may be attributed to a chemical imbalance in their brain or a traumatic life event of the past, and not to online usage. Another factor to note, is 20 percent is not the majority. Because of this, it is unfair to generalize an entire population based on such low numbers.
There are several ways this author could strengthen their argument. First they could find out a detailed history of each participant’s general mood, mental disorders, and pivotal life events. The author could also test for a wider variety of symptoms, instead of just trouble concentrating and feeling sad. The author could also record the amount of time each participant has reported feeling blue to see if it could be related to an extraneous factor.
Overall, the author of this argument has a good base on an extremely poignant topic. This argument has the potential to be strong. However, its current lack of detailed and thorough evidence from the survey render this argument fairly baseless and overgeneralized.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
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Message: Add a space between sentences
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242489270386 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.148068669528 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0965665236052 0.0836205057962 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0429184549356 0.0520304965353 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0300429184549 0.0272364105082 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107296137339 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0450643776824 0.0416121511921 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.96332720069 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0236051502146 0.026700313972 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00429184549356 0.001811407834 237% => OK
Determiners: 0.113733905579 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0236051502146 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00858369098712 0.0127820249294 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2571.0 2731.13054187 94% => OK
No of words: 409.0 446.07635468 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.28606356968 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.408312958435 0.378187486979 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.322738386308 0.287650121315 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222493887531 0.208842608468 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144254278729 0.135150697306 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96332720069 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 207.018472906 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518337408313 0.469332199767 110% => OK
Word variations: 57.9894125918 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5909090909 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3442580628 57.7814097925 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.863636364 141.986410481 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5909090909 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 50.8647477217 51.9672348444 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.78640776699 1.8405768891 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334851301886 0.441005458295 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101741226688 0.135418324435 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0599445945886 0.0829849096947 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.517473231627 0.58762219726 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.106618294138 0.147661913831 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124922186356 0.193483328276 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762739363666 0.0970749176394 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.27909694134 0.42659136922 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0308732700413 0.0774707102158 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221253801549 0.312017818177 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913013416579 0.0698173142475 131% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.87684729064 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 15.0 5.36822660099 279% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.