"Scientific research has shown that Clear-One Bottled Water has many minerals needed for good health and that it is totally free of bacteria. Residents of the town where the water is bottled get sick less frequently than the national average. Even though Clear-One is higher-priced than the other bottled waters, it is a good long-term investment in your health."
Directions: Discuss how well-reasoned you find this argument. Be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in this argument. You may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also include what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sounds, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
The arguement claims that if a person drinks Clear- One Bottled water will get sick less frequently than the national average. The arguement here is stated in a way that does not account for other factors that help people stay healthy. The conclusion of the arguement is based on a number of assumptions for which there is no clearly evidence supporting it. Therefore the arguement is unconvincing and incomplete.
First of all there are numerous assumptions that the arguement is based on. The first assumption is that people are very brand loyal to Clear One, for which there is no strong evidence supporting it. We have many brands of mineraled and flavoured water that are there in the market which is endorsed by sportspersons and fitness brands. Let us take the example of one8 brand that is endorsed by Virat Kohli, which has entered the vitamin water bottle business. Since the brand is endorsed by a high class sportsperson, people tend to be loyal to that brand.
Moreover the arguement also assumes that the drinking of bottled water is the only reason for people getting sick less frequently that the national average. There is no concrete numbers mentioned about the above claim. This is just based on a scientific research, which is also not known to be verified by any established research agency. The company does not provide certain numbers from the survey or the research stating their target population, research period and other concrete evidence to support their conclusion.
The above conclusion can be strengthed by stating statistics about the research showing the brand loyalty, which can known by the retention rate & new customer acquisition rate and number of sick people registered who are using Clear One Bottled water vs normal water.
In conclusion the arguement is flawed, for the above mentioned reasons. Also to determine the merit of the arguement, as mentioned above, we need to have number and statistics supporting the conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The arguement claims that if a person drinks Clear- One Bottled water will get sick less frequently than the national average.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: The arguement here is stated in a way that does not account for other factors that help people stay healthy.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: The conclusion of the arguement is based on a number of assumptions for which there is no clearly evidence supporting it.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Therefore the arguement is unconvincing and incomplete.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: First of all there are numerous assumptions that the arguement is based on.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: We have many brands of mineraled and flavoured water that are there in the market which is endorsed by sportspersons and fitness brands.
Error: flavoured Suggestion: flavored
Error: mineraled Suggestion: mineral
Error: sportspersons Suggestion: sports persons
Sentence: The above conclusion can be strengthed by stating statistics about the research showing the brand loyalty, which can known by the retention rate & new customer acquisition rate and number of sick people registered who are using Clear One Bottled water vs normal water.
Error: strengthed Suggestion: strengthen
Sentence: In conclusion the arguement is flawed, for the above mentioned reasons.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Also to determine the merit of the arguement, as mentioned above, we need to have number and statistics supporting the conclusion.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 325 350
No. of Characters: 1613 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.246 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.963 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.603 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.006 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... factors that help people stay healthy. The conclusion of the arguement is based on...
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Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e is no clearly evidence supporting it. Therefore the arguement is unconvincing and incom...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ople tend to be loyal to that brand. Moreover the arguement also assumes that the dri...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'know' or 'be known'?
Suggestion: know; be known
...ch showing the brand loyalty, which can known by the retention rate & new customer ac...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 73, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...lawed, for the above mentioned reasons. Also to determine the merit of the arguement...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 325.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09538461538 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66866229416 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483076923077 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1570969555 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250029190817 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853303600367 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108649613937 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142375742684 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657960150017 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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