To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
Buckingham college is planning to build more number of dormitories to serve a better housing needs of the students, expecting the growth in enrollment and various other factors. Stated in this manner, the argument fails to mention several other factors as well as support the given reasons, on basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies upon assumptions, for which there is no clear evidence. thus, the argument is unconvincing, weak and has several flaws.
Firstly, argument mentions that based on current trends, the enrollment of new students is growing and is expected to be doubled by next 50 years, which leads to inadequate number of dormitories, that are existing, for accommodating the enrolled students. Here, the credibility of the growth rate mentioned is dubious. it is possible that the number of enrollments are increasing in next few years, but to say the definite growth of 100% in next 50 years is a little bit of stretch. also, the increase in number of students doesn't imply that number of dormitories required will also increase. Not all students require dormitory stay. they might stay off-Campus or the town might be their native place, which leads to no requirement of the housing service. Hence before correlating the increase in enrollment with the need of dormitories, they should look into various queries like how many students need dormitory services? how many students are from local place? etc. thus further analyzing the factor will give better clarity for the argument.
Secondly, argument mentions that the average rent for an apartment in the town has risen over past years which will make it un-affordable for students looking for housing. In an ideal market, if the average rent of apartment has increased then, the fees for the dormitories will also increase. also if average rent of apartments are high that doesn't imply that there are no apartments will low rent. also, it is possible that in certain area of the town the rent is very high whereas the rent in other areas are relatively low and cost effective, which leads to an unclear picture of average rent in the town. author needs to further looks into various facts like how many students are looking for off-campus housing service? how many housing services are present in near by area of Buckingham college? etc. which might give proper and accurate insights regarding the off-campus housing.
Thirdly, author mentions that attractiveness of a dormitory will lead to increase in enrollment numbers, which in turn will create the need of more dormitories. but the basic concept, that the student will enroll in a college just on the basis of appearance of the housing services is absurd. students enroll in college based on various other factors like subjects available, job opportunities, ranking of college etc. the attractiveness of dormitories would be most likely last factor for a student while choosing a college.
In summary, the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing. it could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts and information. In order to assess the merits of certain situation it is essential to have full knowledge of all the contributing factors.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 531 350
No. of Characters: 2647 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.8 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.985 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.696 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.063 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.627 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Buckingham
buckingham college is planning to build more numbe...
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Line 1, column 412, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
..., for which there is no clear evidence. thus, the argument is unconvincing, weak and...
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Line 4, column 319, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...f the growth rate mentioned is dubious. it is possible that the number of enrollme...
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Line 4, column 460, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...te growth of 100% in next 50 years is a little bit of strech. also, the increase in number...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 482, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ext 50 years is a little bit of strech. also, the increase in number of students doe...
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Line 4, column 523, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...lso, the increase in number of students doesnt imply that number of dormitories requir...
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Line 4, column 633, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ot all students require dormitory stay. they might stay off-Campus or the town might...
^^^^
Line 4, column 755, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... no requirement of the housing service. Hence before correlating the increase in enro...
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Line 4, column 923, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
... many students need dormitory services? how many students are from local place? etc...
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Line 4, column 963, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Etc
...how many students are from local place? etc. thus further analysing the factor will...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...for the dormitories will also increase. also if average rent of aparments are high t...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...for the dormitories will also increase. also if average rent of aparments are high t...
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Line 7, column 342, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...average rent of aparments are high that doesnt imply that there are no apartments will...
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Line 7, column 399, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... there are no apartments will low rent. also, it is possible that in certain area of...
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Line 7, column 609, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...ar picture of average rent in the town. author needs to further looks into various fac...
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Line 7, column 725, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...looking ofr off-campus housing service? how many housing services are present in ne...
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Line 7, column 766, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...ow many housing services are present in near by area of buckingham college? etc. which ...
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Line 7, column 802, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Etc
... in near by area of buckingham college? etc. which might give proper and accurate i...
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Line 10, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ll create the need of more dormitories. but the basic concept, that the student wil...
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Line 10, column 293, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Students
...ance of the housing services is absurd. students enroll in college based on avrious othe...
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Line 13, column 64, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...t is flawed and therefore unconvincing. it could be considerably strenghtened if t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, whereas, while, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2727.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 529.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1550094518 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77202077642 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463137996219 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6844510698 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5925925926 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92592592593 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259850030344 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668302620103 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832096335476 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133374460551 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089323273922 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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