The author argues that Mason City residents consider water sports among their favorite recreational activities. He states that the city residents do not benefit from these as it supposed to be simply because the government received complaints from the residents about the water and its quality. For these reasons, the government decided to take further actions to clean up Mason River. However, the author lacks support adequate evidences to support his argument.
First and foremost, the author mentions that the government received some complaints from the residents, however, he does not explain the nature of these complaints and what the residents actually want. Probably, most of the residents complain about the smell of the water because it bothers them not because they want to use this water for sports. Accordingly, the government spending money on Mason River will be of no use at all but a waste of the government’s efforts and money. The government can save that money and utilize it for other advantages for the citizens, instead of wasting it. Had the author explained more about the complaints, the argument would have made more sense.
Second, the author assures that the river sports will increase after the government cleans it up. However, this argument is not bolstered by any evidence in the argument. In other words, what is the basis for making the author so certain that the sports will increase! It might be possible that the city residents enjoy other sports other than the water ones. Also, the argument ignores to take into consideration the weather of that city; it could be cold all over the year, and accordingly they do not find water sports enjoyable.
It is very clear that the author lays his argument but without enough evidences to support his claim. Thus, the argument does not appear cogent to the mind, and it is not enough convincing at all. Had he bolstered his argument with the above mentioned points, I believe the argument would have made much more sense to the reader.
- In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes littl 63
- Essay topic: In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department 50
- Because people increasingly eat at restaurants, all restaurants should be required to display nutritional information about the meals they serve. This knowledge makes it easier for diners to make healthy choices and reduces the risk of diet related health 26
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ave made much more sense to the reader.
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249336870027 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.153846153846 0.15541462614 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0371352785146 0.0836205057962 44% => Some adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0663129973475 0.0520304965353 127% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0583554376658 0.0272364105082 214% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111405835544 0.125424944231 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0185676392573 0.0416121511921 45% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.5464969853 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0238726790451 0.026700313972 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0053050397878 0.001811407834 293% => OK
Determiners: 0.143236074271 0.113004496875 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0212201591512 0.0255425247493 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0053050397878 0.0127820249294 42% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2036.0 2731.13054187 75% => OK
No of words: 338.0 446.07635468 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.02366863905 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.343195266272 0.378187486979 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263313609467 0.287650121315 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186390532544 0.208842608468 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112426035503 0.135150697306 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5464969853 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 207.018472906 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488165680473 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 50.1398594996 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8823529412 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1661378046 57.7814097925 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.764705882 141.986410481 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 46.2137138879 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.3619047619 1.8405768891 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400884987428 0.441005458295 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.142081600399 0.135418324435 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0610533596817 0.0829849096947 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.610328474913 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.100487662129 0.147661913831 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189363931029 0.193483328276 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810910131769 0.0970749176394 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.537966593115 0.42659136922 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0680546998402 0.0774707102158 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301048142293 0.312017818177 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872632188586 0.0698173142475 125% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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