This argument, about the way of rearing of children in the island of Tertia , While appears cogent enough and plausible, it is however, rife with certain key assumptions which call for additional evidence.
First and foremost, it is mentioned that Dr.Field’s conclusion about the rearing method in Tertia is rather archaic, which is twenty years ago in whereas Dr.Karp is performing his experiments in recent times according to the information. Consequently, Dr.Karps’s contemporary experiments might not reflect the conditions twenty years ago, for all we know, the actual origins of people might have changed let alone and their customs and cultures during these decades. As a result, it rather proves to be capricious to bluntly overthrow the results and conclusions of Dr.Field without confirming whether or not the people and their customs haven’t changed.
Further, it is stated that, Dr.Karp has interviewed some of the children from Tertia, nevertheless, there is no standard evidence that this particular set of children interviewed represent the whole community overall. It might so happen that those interviewed children are indeed disparate from rest of the village and thereby making them a biased set and colouring the results and rendering the conclusion fallacious. On the other hand, had it been evident that these set of children are indeed a good representative of the community overall, the results have been reliable.
Additionally, the argument draws a rather unclear connection between children talking more about their biological parents and less about other adults to the earlier conclusion about them being reared by village false. In addition to this it should be noted that the people who were interviewed are children, for all we know, they are rather benighted beings and it is not wise to base an entire conclusion on the words of just them. It is by no tenable means that this is proved. It is not rather such unequivocal that this implies they are reared by the biological parents only and not by the village. This rather tenuous conclusion is totally devoid of any evidence for that matter.
Furthermore, the author also rather boldly points out that the falsity, if at all, of Dr.Field’s earlier conclusions about Tertia which is based on his observation, is a failure of the entire Observation-centred approach. For all we know, Dr.Field may indeed be correct since he has observed things and documented them and in Dr.Karp’s case, as mentioned earlier, it is children who are interviewed without actually asked about the question at hand, the rearing custom. As a result, it is a bit precipitous to base on this and state the interview-centred approach supersedes observation-centred approach.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2236 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.002 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.891 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.354 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
This argument, about the way of rearing ...
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Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ring of children in the island of Tertia , While appears cogent enough and plausib...
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Line 3, column 45, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Field&apos
...t and foremost, it is mentioned that Dr.Field's conclusion about the rearing method i...
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Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...which is twenty years ago in whereas Dr.Karp is performing his experiments in recent...
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Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karps&apos
...ng to the information. Consequently, Dr.Karps's contemporary experiments might not re...
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Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Field
...throw the results and conclusions of Dr.Field without confirming whether or not the p...
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Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...clusions of Dr.Field without confirming whether or not the people and their customs haven&apos...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...nged. Further, it is stated that, Dr.Karp has interviewed some of the children fr...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...is stated that, Dr.Karp has interviewed some of the children from Tertia, nevertheless, the...
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Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Field&apos
... out that the falsity, if at all, of Dr.Field's earlier conclusions about Tertia whic...
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Line 9, column 248, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Field
...n-centred approach. For all we know, Dr.Field may indeed be correct since he has obse...
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Line 9, column 335, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp&apos
...ed things and documented them and in Dr.Karp's case, as mentioned earlier, it is chi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, whereas, while, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32191780822 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12324026449 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.294594095 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.4 119.503703932 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.70786347227 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255663141649 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844192903612 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567341070036 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133457017454 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459434587084 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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