Of the two leading real estate firms in our town - Adams Realty and Fitch Realty - Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: Ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams.
In the given letter, the author proposes to use Adams Realty if someone wants to sell their home quickly and at good price. The author's proposes this by conparing Adams Realty with Fitch Realty and pointing out that Adams Realty is the better option. The author's comparsion of the two realty agencies is based on some examples which are flawed. The examples mentioned by the authored need to be assessed properly before one can go with author's proposal.
Firstly, the author mentions is the number of people working at Adams and Fitch realty. According to him, Adam's realty is better since the number of people working there is more than those working at Fitch's. However, comparing the number of people working at a firm to the success of the firm is not correct. Nowhere, has the author mentioned anything about the qualification, work experience about the people working at both the firms. He also mentions that Adam's agents work full time while Fitch's work half-time. The amount of time for which a person work can measure the quality of work a person a does. It may be the case that agents at Fitch's can sell more number of properties as Adam's by working for half time. These statistics need to be properly verified before making any decision based on them.
Next, the author points out that the revenue of Adam's is twice as that of Fitch's. But, the data is not very clear. It is possible that Adam's sells only high value properties because of which their revenue is high. Their is also another possibility that Adam's charge more brokerage to the customer for property sell explaining their high revenue. Hence, the argument cannot be concluded without proper figures.
Lastly, the author cites his own example that Adam's sells property faster than Fitch's. According to him, when he listed his home with Fitch's ten years ago, it took them four months to sell it. When he recently registered another house with Adam's, they sold it in just month. However, the author has not mentioned anything about the location of house, their size, amenities provided with them. Their is a possibility that the new house was sold early because the house was in a good locality and was relatively new. Also, we cannot compare the real estate market conditions ten years apart. The market situation can change a lot of such long duration of time. For instance, the inflation has reduced over the time period and mortgage rates are lower, so people are more readily buying homes.
Considering the above flaws, the argument seems very unconvincing. By just comparing the workforce and revenue of the firms, the performance of the two firms cannot be properly assessed. The author should support the evidence with proper statistics and other factors like efficiency of employees, service charge of the firms, etc.
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- Of the two leading real estate firms in our town - Adams Realty and Fitch Realty - Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as hig 50
- Of the two leading real estate firms in our town - Adams Realty and Fitch Realty - Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as hig 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use 'propose'.
Suggestion: propose
... quickly and at good price. The authors proposes this by conparing Adams Realty with Fit...
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...ased on some examples which are flawed. The examples mentioned by the authored need...
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Suggestion: fulltime
...He also mentions that Adams agents work full time while Fitchs work half-time. The amount...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a doe' or simply 'does'?
Suggestion: a doe; does
...an measure the quality of work a person a does. It may be the case that agents at Fitc...
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...because of which their revenue is high. Their is also another possibility that Adams ...
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...eir size, amenities provided with them. Their is a possibility that the new house was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 477.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88888888889 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33782983992 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469601677149 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3724048638 57.8364921388 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.2857142857 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0357142857 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96428571429 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275081997047 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076565556114 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757330901678 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141456919645 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064119786756 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.