Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.
In this argument, author suggesting that Adams Realty is better than Fitch Realty by giving some parameters of both the firms. Here, author have taken some parameters which can be considered to compare these firms. But, factors other than these may also play a lead role to deside which form is better. So, auther can give more evidences to prove superiority of Adams Realty.
As the auther comparing number of agents in both of the firms, which can not give the specific idea about the value and size of the firm. The firm having less but more effective workers can have more growth than the firm having more but less effective workers. When author compares the revenue of the firm, it has given only last year data in the argument. Author may give more statistics about both firms in past some years. Superiority of the firm can also depend on the growth rate of the firms. For example, revenue of the firm is more than other one but the growth rate of the first one is higher then it can dominate over the other.
At the end of argument, author camparing the time taken for selling the home, which is irrelevent because the comparison is between last year and ten years ago. It may possible that ten years ago the demand of real estate was lower than last year. It may also possible that the market situation at that time can be worse ten year ago, so that it may take long time to sell home in Fitch Realty. So, on the basis of these data, author can not specifically say that one should sell home quickly and good price using Adams Realty.
According to argument, author suggesting to use Adams Realty to get good price and fast selling based on irrelevent comparisons, which can not definitely state the superiority of the Adams Realty. Author have not state any proof for the getting better price using Adams Realty. So, author should have given more proof and statistics of both the firms to decide which one is better. Also, author should have considered other factors which can also state the difference between the firms and prove the duperiority of one of them.
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- Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year 77
- We can learn much more from people whose view we share than from people whose views contradict our own. 58
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1666 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.491 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.126 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.166 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'higher than'?
Suggestion: higher than
...but the growth rate of the first one is higher then it can dominate over the other. At t...
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Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... growth rate of the first one is higher then it can dominate over the other. At t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61455525606 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17449228055 2.78398813304 78% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415094339623 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.988049106 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1111111111 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186695874638 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715019656697 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658364346403 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124047263003 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349297183293 0.0628817314937 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.32208582834 82% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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