"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town---Adams Realty and Fitch Realty---Adams is
clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom
work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch,
and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes
listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took
more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it
took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should us Adam.
The author proposed that Adam Realty is better than the Fitch Realty and if anyone wants to sell a home quickly they should prefer Adam. However, the proposal contains some flaws and will not be accepted if it fails to answer some critical assumption. Moreover, the assumption draws an accurate conclusion and conclusion to dismiss the inaccurate assumption.
Firstly, the author assumes that Adam and Fitch real estate firm have equal eligibility whereas other estate firms in the town are not as better as Adam and Fitch. The author unfairly undermine the other firm of the town which is undermining the statement. However, the author also states that Adams has 40 real estate agents whereas Fitch has only 25. A good number of agent does not mean that the company is in a better position than others. It may be possible that the Adam agent all are not high profile agent and Fitch has less amount of agent but all of them are high profile and international agent.
Secondly, the homeowner unfairly assumes that both real estate firm sells an equal number of home. Homeowner states that Adam last year average home sold $168,000 but Fitch only $144,000 which is not correct information. For example, assuming all houses are the same price and Adam sold 20 houses whereas Fitch sold 50 houses then the average will be grater of Adam Realty. Moreover, if last year revenue was higher in Adam is not possibly indicate that Fitch did not earn any revenue. It is possible that last year Adam suppress the Fitch but, Fitch could be also suppressed Adam in the preceding year.
Thirdly, homeowner claims that Fitch took more time to sell the house but, owner consider the situation that occurs 10 years ago. In 10 years the situation could be changed. Moreover, the owner did not specify the location, dimension of the house. The revenue and time also depend on this factor.
While the overall hypothesis is quite interesting but by examing various factor it can be concluded that to validate the proposal required more information. However, The author proposal only accepted if all weakness already referred are removed and answer the question accurately.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 365 350
No. of Characters: 1749 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.371 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.792 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.283 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.178 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ate firms in the town are not as better as Adam and Fitch. The author unfairly und...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 55.5748502994 34% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 365.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91780821918 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36654927084 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476712328767 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6080553594 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.4736842105 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392001243854 0.218282227539 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118314092357 0.0743258471296 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119916567648 0.0701772020484 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181405763831 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125146376195 0.0628817314937 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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