The argument presented here by the Board of Directors of Monarch Books is deeply flawed. It advocated for the fact that opening a cafe will attract more customers and help them compete with Regal books. This recommendation will completely fall apart if the assumptions in this arguments were not true.Let us look at these assumptions one by one.
First, the Board assumes that opening a cafe in a book store is a good idea as it might attract more customers, but the argument doesnt show that opening a cafe might deline their current customer base as many people might prefer to read in silence and opening a cafe would increase a lot of noise in the bookstore.
And secondthe space for cafe was recommended to made out of children'sassuming the factthat because national census is decreasing therefore the local population might also suffer a similar trend. But it might be possible that while number of children are increasing near the area of bookstore even if number is falling in the nation. Therefore a survey should be done to find the number of children in the surrounding area to buttress the argument.
Also we have no knowledge that after opening a cafe in Regal books whether their customer base increased or not.
Clearly there are many fallacies in this argument which renders it too vague Clearly the author could have made the argument that there is the decline in number of children by providing logical statistics and strong examples.
Sentence: This recommendation will completely fall apart if the assumptions in this arguments were not true.Let us look at these assumptions one by one.
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Sentence: And secondthe space for cafe was recommended to made out of children'sassuming the factthat because national census is decreasing therefore the local population might also suffer a similar trend.
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Sentence: First, the Board assumes that opening a cafe in a book store is a good idea as it might attract more customers, but the argument doesnt show that opening a cafe might deline their current customer base as many people might prefer to read in silence and opening a cafe would increase a lot of noise in the bookstore.
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Sentence: And secondthe space for cafe was recommended to made out of children'sassuming the factthat because national census is decreasing therefore the local population might also suffer a similar trend.
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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No. of Words: 250 350
More content wanted.
For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
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Score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 250 350
No. of Characters: 1189 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.976 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.756 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.525 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.612 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.734 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5