In the memo, the author concludes that while the Department of Education in Atta state suggests that the teachers should assign homework to the students every day, the teachers should not assign homework to the students more than twice a week. The writer reaches this conclusion based on the survey in other states, to be named Sanlee and Marlee, and the poor performance of students in Sanlee state, where 86 percent of teachers assign three to five times a week assignments to the students, whereas this percentage is less than 25 percent in Marlee state. Nonetheless, while the conclusion drawn by the writer might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all, in the survey, only 'Math' and 'Science' teachers participated, and other teachers in different areas such as history, art, social sciences, and so on were excluded. On the other hand, all these courses are included in the student's cumulative GPA. The other teachers in Marlee might act in contrast to math and science teachers in that state and assign homework to the students on a daily basis, while the opposite scenario might happen in Sanlee state. If this scenario has merit, then the author's assertion that based on a survey that just included math and science teachers, it is better for students to be given assignments less than twice a week is significantly hampered.
Secondly, the author assumes that the grading criteria in these two states are quite similar. Maybe the teachers' grading criteria in Sanlee state are biased in favor of students' final exam scores. In contrast, the instructors in Manlee state pay more attention to assignments and projects that pupils do during the semester, and the students' performance in their final exam does not significantly impact their overall grades. The writer's argument does not hold water if the above is true.
Finally, the author utterly overlooks the performance and level of literacy of the teachers in these two states. The teachers in Marlee state might be more erudite than the teachers in Sanlee state. It is even possible that the techniques that the teachers in Marlee state implement to convey the material to the students are more effective than the techniques that the teachers in Sanlee state utilize. If it is true that the teachers' knowledge or teaching methods have a noticeable impact on students' performance, the credibility of the author's claim decreases substantially.
To recapitulate, it is possible that by assigning less homework to the students, their scores would become better. Nevertheless, as it stands now, the contention relies on three groundless assumptions that render its conclusion unpersuasive at best and specious at worst. Therefore, the author has to provide additional evidence on three fronts: including teachers other than 'Math' and 'Science' in the survey, the difference between the grading criteria in different schools and states, and the effect of teachers' level of literacy or teaching method on students' performance.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2539 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.088 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.719 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 116 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.92 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e. If this scenario has merit, then the authors assertion that based on a survey that j...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... pupils do during the semester, and the students performance in their final exam does no...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...cantly impact their overall grades. The writers argument does not hold water if the abo...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 428, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...e state utilize. If it is true that the teachers knowledge or teaching methods have a no...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 495, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ing methods have a noticeable impact on students performance, the credibility of the aut...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 553, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...level of literacy or teaching method on students performance.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, as to, in contrast, such as, first of all, in contrast to, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2602.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21442885772 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79220386507 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430861723447 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1483567742 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.555555556 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7222222222 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1666666667 5.70786347227 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255208214965 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847883211225 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668364238107 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151297436325 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531011679402 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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