Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The argument claims that Woven baskets which have been found in plaea were not uniquely Palean because of a recent discovery by archaeologists. However, author fails to mention several key factors to bolster his/her argument. Hence, the argument can be consider unwarranted.
To begin with, Author readily assumes that Lithos was an ancient village far from palea. This is just an unsupported assumption. Perhaps, at that time the two villages were the same one. Still there have some possibilities that due to certain geographical change, the two villages were separated by a river.
Secondly, the author argues that, the brim river is very deep. For that reason palean peoples used transport to cross the river. Even we consider that the two villages were far from each other, this assumption is made without considering the time difference. There have some possibilities that during that period, the river was not so deep and broad. May be, people from palea could easily cross the river by their foot and traded their baskets in lithos. Also, Dweller from lithos could have come to palea and brought these baskets or learnt the procedure to make palean baskets.
Again, autho does not mention about the archaeologists survey area. There could have the possibilities that a palean boat was there near the river. But Archaeologist didn’t survey those areas, so could not find the boat.
Furthermore, according to the argument, the only way to get connected between people of these two villages was river. But the other ways of transportation cannot be denied. There could have some other ways like hidden jungle or cave which connected two villages. Palean and Lithos civilian could have pass through these paths.
In conclusion, the author claims is unpersuasive. Because it fails to answer several key questions like. What about the others way of transportation? What was the condition of the river at that ancient time? What was the geographical condition of that region? To bolster it further, the autor must provide some clear evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Again, autho does not mention about the archaeologists survey area.
Error: autho Suggestion: author
Sentence: To bolster it further, the autor must provide some clear evidence.
Error: autor Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 336 350
No. of Characters: 1660 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.281 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.827 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.267 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 187, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ime the two villages were the same one. Still there have some possibilities that due ...
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Line 6, column 50, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ion, the author claims is unpersuasive. Because it fails to answer several key question...
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Line 6, column 208, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tion of the river at that ancient time? What was the geographical condition of that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 334.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15568862275 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65321496363 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52994011976 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.8473053892 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6867389935 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.2307692308 119.503703932 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.8461538462 23.324526521 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178657077593 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043830328625 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562746977832 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904626044178 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531211814317 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.76 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 11.1389221557 61% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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