1. The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.
"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people ten to twenty-five years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Whirlwind video games have experimented a sales decline over the past two years, in order to increase the sales they have introduced several games which are really likely to atrac customers according with a survey. However, the conclusion article relies in some assumptions which are not proved at all or for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincig and has several flaws.
First of all, althoug the argument stated that Whirlwind video games had experinmented a sales decline, any figure to support that is presented. Reading the argument is impossible to know if the sales decline is important or not. A sales decrease could represent a 1% of sales or a 90% and, therefore, without further information, is impossible to asses how important this decline is. However, the article seems to asum that the decline is really improtant. If the decrease of sales is proved not to be important, any decision to fix it should be taken and the article at all becomes ineccesary.
Secondly, the main causes of this decline are not adresses in the paper. The selection of video games in the shop is not the only factor to take into account, as the autor readily assumes. For example, the prirate download or the oppening of shopping centre near the shop could also affect the sales. In case that there exists any other possible reason to explain the decline, the solution of changins the videogames selection could not fix the problem at all.
Finally, the decision of what videogames intoduce to attrac new customers is bassed on a survey which scope is not stated in the article. The author trust on the survey results while the is not enougth information. How many people had been interviewed? What ages-groups were they? Further information is nedeed in order to decide how reliable the survey is.
Summarizing, the argument is falwed becuse of the above mentioned causes and is therefore inconvicing. Moreover, without further information that proves if the assumptions ar rithg or wrong, the argument remains unsubstantiated.
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Sentence: The author trust on the survey results while the is not enougth information.
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Sentence: Whirlwind video games have experimented a sales decline over the past two years, in order to increase the sales they have introduced several games which are really likely to atrac customers according with a survey.
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Sentence: Hence, the argument is unconvincig and has several flaws.
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Sentence: However, the article seems to asum that the decline is really improtant.
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Sentence: If the decrease of sales is proved not to be important, any decision to fix it should be taken and the article at all becomes ineccesary.
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Sentence: Secondly, the main causes of this decline are not adresses in the paper.
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Sentence: For example, the prirate download or the oppening of shopping centre near the shop could also affect the sales.
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Sentence: In case that there exists any other possible reason to explain the decline, the solution of changins the videogames selection could not fix the problem at all.
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Sentence: Finally, the decision of what videogames intoduce to attrac new customers is bassed on a survey which scope is not stated in the article.
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Sentence: The author trust on the survey results while the is not enougth information.
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Sentence: Summarizing, the argument is falwed becuse of the above mentioned causes and is therefore inconvicing.
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