Of Altamonte students polled, 65 percent say they participate in either an intramural, varsity, or community sports team. Being a member of a sport team keeps one fit and healthy and promotes an active life style. Since the majority of students are taking

The argument that eliminating all physical education classes and putting more resources into the development of varsity sport teams is a very simplistic view without strong evidence to support itself. The argument’s statistics are vague and poorly labeled; they lead to a faulty conclusion. The author does not pay attention to using better examples for supporting his or her idea and by giving simple reason tries to justify readers to eliminate all physical education classes and replace their budget with developing varsity sports teams. The author could illustrate strong evidence to reinforce the argument.

The statistics in the argument increases ambiguity because is not clear that 65 percent of how many students of Altamonte school say they participate in varsity or community sports team. The author does not mention what kinds of students were polled. Athlete students might be polled and increased the percentage to 65%. The writer could clarify statistics and consider what kinds of students were polled. Maybe senior students intend to participate in either and intramural, varsity, or community sports team and increase the votes.

The author also develop the argument by explain irrelevant subject which increase vague without supporting the conclusion. Being a member of sport team has some disadvantages that cannot be over looked easily and students who are a member of their school’s sport team face several problems due to devoting most of their time for their team. In some cases, being a member of sport team put them under tremendous pressure and threats their healthy. Furthermore, students could keep their body fit and healthy through exercise and individual sports instead of being a member of sport team and have stressful situation. The author could take other advantage of being a member of team sport into account, like increasing the self- confidence by cooperating with other members of team sports, learning team work skill, and promoting their knowledge about certain team sports by sharing their information among team sport’s members.

The other main weak point of the argument is about the conclusion. Majority of students are taking care of their physical fitness so they need more physical education classes in their high school to improve their healthy life style. By devoting more resources into the development of the intramural and varsity sports teams and eliminating other physical education classes, some students who do not have enough time to go health club, could not take care their fitness and run into several healthy problems. Having physical education classes at school enforce students to increase their knowledge about healthy foods, healthy life style and learning good methods to keep themselves fit which they cannot find by being a member of team sports.

In conclusion, the argument does not have strong evidence and using poorly sentences increase ambiguity instead of supporting it. The writer should use sentences in a better way and explain the advantages of being a team sport’s member instead of generalizing. In addition, the writer should justify the readers about using some numbers and terms like 65% and majority of students.