some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults . other people think that their friends are the most important influence on young adults . which view do u agree with ? use examples to support your position.
A person is known by the friends he makes . According to the famous saying "birds of the same feather,flock together!" . The most crucial period of a person's life is his adolescence , the greatest part of which is spent in various activities at colleges or tiutions or at playgrounds with friends around them at all times. Since this being the influential age, youngsters get influenced more by their friends than their family.
Yongsters often create an euphoric spirit and enthusiastically participate in different happenings within and without the academics . It is at this stage where a person develops his individuality , logics and cognitive skills beginnig to compare and compete his efficiency with others. Pragmatically , young adults share their emotional disturbances with their friends as they seem to be more comfortable and close.Therefore,youngsters like to challenge and explore new tasks with anecdote of adventure. Likewise, encourage each other and treat their friends as equals .
On the other hand, although the family forms the primary source of influence , young adults often go beyond the cares and affections of their parents . Youngsters may find parent's discipline , instructions and corrections as nagging.
However , a youngster from good moral values and happy family is likely to balance both friends and family influences effectively than a young adult from an unhappy or broken family who tend to incline towards their friends than their family .
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Sentence: It is at this stage where a person develops his individuality , logics and cognitive skills beginnig to compare and compete his efficiency with others.
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