The staff welfare manager of Human resources at Bizware Software Industires give recommenadtion to his company president that comapny have to use hidden camera to monitor their empolyees so that we can we can reduce the number of hour of empolyess spend on the non prodective activites and as well as we can increase Bizware's productivity and profit.
The staff welfare manager of Human resources at Bizware Software Industires give recommenadtion to his company president that comapny have to use hidden camera to monitor their empolyees so that we can we can reduce the number of hour of empolyess spend on the non prodective activites and as well as we can increase Bizware's productivity and profit. But manager should not complling the president because manager have to answer many queations.
First of all, Manager said about the nation survey that many of office worker use comapny time for purely personal purpose.But it not mantion that is their comapny is include in the survey? If yes then waht was the result of the survey? what % of people used the comapny time to do their personal work? All this information is need to proof that the employess in the Bizware industry is also waste the comapny time to do their own personal work or gossip. It the % of people do such activity is very less then no need to install hidden camera. You cn fire that employess and can give waring to them, that it no need to hidden cameras.
Secondly, I the comapny uses the hidden camera to watch then employess activity then how costing is go for it?If the all empolyees have the head of manager then what the used of the camera? Beacuse the manager can also control their emplyess. if comapny install it then how it will reduce the number of hours of employess spends no no productive activity? .How the camera help you? And more importanly how the camera help you to increase the productivity and the profit? all this are not menation by the manager . Because if you install the new system then it will also have maintenace cost ,purchase cost ,setup cost, requried more responsible manager to observer it, have pay salary for it.All this costing is include .
Finally manager have give the anser to this question or articulate their argument to amke it more stronger to complleing the president
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Sentence: First of all, Manager said about the nation survey that many of office worker use comapny time for purely personal purpose.But it not mantion that is their comapny is include in the survey?
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and include
Sentence: It the of people do such activity is very less then no need to install hidden camera.
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Suggestion: Refer to It and the
Sentence: You cn fire that employess and can give waring to them, that it no need to hidden cameras.
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Suggestion: Refer to it and no
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and hidden
Sentence: Secondly, I the comapny uses the hidden camera to watch then employess activity then how costing is go for it?If the all empolyees have the head of manager then what the used of the camera?
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Suggestion: Refer to I and the
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Suggestion: Refer to the and all
Sentence: And more importanly how the camera help you to increase the productivity and the profit? all this are not menation by the manager .
Description: The fragment camera help you is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace help with verb, past tense
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a verb 'to be', present tense, 2nd person singular or all
Suggestion: Refer to this and are
Sentence: Because if you install the new system then it will also have maintenace cost ,purchase cost ,setup cost, requried more responsible manager to observer it, have pay salary for it.All this costing is include .
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and include
Sentence: Finally manager have give the anser to this question or articulate their argument to amke it more stronger to complleing the president
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and give
Sentence: The staff welfare manager of Human resources at Bizware Software Industires give recommenadtion to his company president that comapny have to use hidden camera to monitor their empolyees so that we can we can reduce the number of hour of empolyess spend on the non prodective activites and as well as we can increase Bizware's productivity and profit.
Error: activites Suggestion: activities
Error: recommenadtion Suggestion: recommendation
Error: prodective Suggestion: productive
Error: comapny Suggestion: company
Error: empolyees Suggestion: employees
Error: empolyess Suggestion: employers
Sentence: But manager should not complling the president because manager have to answer many queations.
Error: queations Suggestion: questions
Error: complling Suggestion: compelling
Sentence: First of all, Manager said about the nation survey that many of office worker use comapny time for purely personal purpose.But it not mantion that is their comapny is include in the survey?
Error: mantion Suggestion: mention
Error: comapny Suggestion: company
Sentence: If yes then waht was the result of the survey? what of people used the comapny time to do their personal work?
Error: comapny Suggestion: company
Error: waht Suggestion: want
Sentence: All this information is need to proof that the employess in the Bizware industry is also waste the comapny time to do their own personal work or gossip.
Error: comapny Suggestion: company
Error: employess Suggestion: employers
Sentence: You cn fire that employess and can give waring to them, that it no need to hidden cameras.
Error: cn Suggestion: can
Error: employess Suggestion: employers
Error: waring Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, I the comapny uses the hidden camera to watch then employess activity then how costing is go for it?If the all empolyees have the head of manager then what the used of the camera?
Error: comapny Suggestion: company
Error: employess Suggestion: employers
Error: empolyees Suggestion: employees
Sentence: Beacuse the manager can also control their emplyess. if comapny install it then how it will reduce the number of hours of employess spends no no productive activity? .How the camera help you?
Error: comapny Suggestion: company
Error: employess Suggestion: employers
Error: emplyess Suggestion: employers
Sentence: And more importanly how the camera help you to increase the productivity and the profit? all this are not menation by the manager .
Error: importanly Suggestion: importantly
Error: menation Suggestion: mention
Sentence: Because if you install the new system then it will also have maintenace cost ,purchase cost ,setup cost, requried more responsible manager to observer it, have pay salary for it.All this costing is include .
Error: maintenace Suggestion: maintenance
Error: requried Suggestion: required
Sentence: Finally manager have give the anser to this question or articulate their argument to amke it more stronger to complleing the president
Error: amke Suggestion: make
Error: anser Suggestion: answer
Error: complleing Suggestion: compelling
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1569 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.615 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.404 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.499 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.225 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5