6. A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
It is generally accepted throughout most of nations that before entering college, students are required to take national curriculum. There can be several advantages to adopt the poligy but we should not neglect some cases that this policy would applied to be disadvantageous. Therefore, I believe that a nation should allow some exceptions for specific cases while in most cases, national curriculum should be pursued.
A national curriculum which forms analogous throughout a nation is beneficial in terms of regular indicator to assess the performance of students. Since the level of performance in secondary school is essential for colleges to determine which students can be entered to post-secondary schools, nationally same courses can be an effect way to compare students. For instance, similar to SAT in the U.S., South Korea has a test, called Sooneung -Korean SAT-, to evaluate the performance of students based on what they have learnt. Sooneung is consisted of primary subjects which intended to analyze what extent the student studied in his/her previous works represented in national curriculum. Furthermore, since a vast majority of contents in the test involves contents and equations presented in national curriculum, a student who worked hard following his/her classes in school can achieve high scores consequently. However, when many schools develop their own curriculum, this national form of test cannot be an effective way to evaluate the performance of students.
However, I assert that we should not neglect some unique cases. Prodigies, for instance, can be pertinent cases. Many of students having their own talents in arts, music, or physical aptitude, find it difficult to learn and compete with other students. Usually, they have to develop specialty which indicates distinctive features in order to thrive. So many countries allow these young students to follow exceptional curriculum to spare time for their own time. Cho Sung-jin, the first and only laureate in South Korea won the Chopin International Competition, remarked that he could be successful in his music performance because he could be taught by numerous teachers in his secondary schools which gave him special lessons to music prodigies. There are several kinds of special secondary schools in South Korea which allow some conspicuous students to follow special lectures rather national curriculum. Their performance is evaluated differently from other general students and these unique system can be helpful for college to assess students who have distinctive ability different from studying.
In conclusion, I believe that it is admittedly beneficial to follow national curriculum for students and college administration since students can orient their school works toward national-test system only and college administrations can evaluate students based on the quantitative test scores. Yet we have to consider exceptional cases that some students who have special ability may require another kind of test form to genuinely evaluate their ability far from hindering to develop their extraordinary aptitude.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: There can be several advantages to adopt the poligy but we should not neglect some cases that this policy would applied to be disadvantageous.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to would and applied
flaws:
1.Need at least three arguments. like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: argument 1
para 3: argument 2
para 4: argument 3
para 5: conclusion
2. The third paragraph has a lot of examples but less content for arguments.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2586 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.433 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.871 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 212 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 174 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 124 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.378 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the nations') or simply say ''most nations''.
Suggestion: most of the nations; most nations
It is generally accepted throughout most of nations that before entering college, students ...
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Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'apply'
Suggestion: apply
...glect some cases that this policy would applied to be disadvantageous. Therefore, I bel...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'in most cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252427184466 0.240241500013 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.168932038835 0.157235817809 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.12427184466 0.0880659088768 141% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0388349514563 0.0497285424764 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0446601941748 0.0444667217837 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.11067961165 0.12292977631 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0368932038835 0.0406280797675 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94071446784 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0446601941748 0.030933414821 144% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0563106796117 0.0997080785238 56% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0330097087379 0.0249443105267 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0252427184466 0.0148568991511 170% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3117.0 2732.02544248 114% => OK
No of words: 473.0 452.878318584 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.58985200846 6.0361032391 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.46088794926 0.366273622748 126% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.380549682875 0.280924506359 135% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.274841437632 0.200843997647 137% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.164904862579 0.132149295362 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94071446784 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 219.290929204 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492600422833 0.48968727796 101% => OK
Word variations: 56.5991379584 55.4138127331 102% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.8947368421 23.380412469 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0550039093 59.4972553346 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.052631579 141.124799967 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8947368421 23.380412469 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.674092028746 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 62.9497051296 51.4728631049 122% => OK
Elegance: 1.58461538462 1.64882698954 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371646792604 0.391690518653 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114277699571 0.123202303941 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0766960848732 0.077325440228 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503951441004 0.547984918172 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140678915395 0.149214159877 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146803992053 0.161403998019 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671962510556 0.0892212321368 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.385229843344 0.385218514788 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0836874281473 0.0692045440612 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256752340275 0.275328986314 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716666127691 0.0653680567796 110% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Minimum three arguments wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.