he idea that all parents ought to be required to volunteer in the activities of their children's school seems compelling on the surface, which is based on the belief that parents should be responsible for their offsprings. However, upon further analysis regarding to the education and society, we will find that the premise of this claim is not sound and the idea of education should not be accepted.
People who advocate that it is the obligation of all the parents to be involved in their children's school may hold a common sense about the parents that they should be gracious, dedicated and responsible for their children. They believe that parents are responsible for the childrens' life and help the youngsters form the values of the life and the world. Since parents should be engaged in various aspects of the children's daily life, the school time should not be shadowed and occluded under the parents' eyes. This image of parents is prevailing and shared by diverse culture, which also help us build the ethical basis upon which some laws regarding childrens are built to give the parents the responsibiliy to participate in the education and punish those who dismiss their children's life and even abuse their children.
However, the claim is based on an assumption that all walks of parents are homogenous and have the same or at least approximate ability to join in the activities of their children's school. De facto, in a school, parents are different, who are always from different classes, occupations and even hierarchies. Requiring all the parents to be voluntary will be unfair to those from the working class, but benefits the wealthy family where parents have more leisure and capability of accompanying the children in the school. Based on this societal facts, if we urge all the parents to engage in the school life of the children, the discrepancy between different families will be directly shown on all the children. Students will see that among their class, some parents are busy, tired and trapped into their daily work, whereas some are not and even appear energetic in the after-class activities. This phenomenon will hurt our belief that the school and the education should be a place where children are treated equally and not pliable to the negative influence applied by the unfair society.
Furthermore, the modern research on the family also challenge the idea that parents are naturally good at educating their children. The concept of parent is not always a icon of love or a warm leader in our life, but sometimes a sign of power in modern philosophy. For students, school should be a open and large plain where they are librated from their personal family. In the school, children can study, socialise and entertain with their classmates and peer students without the supervision of their parents. If we consider the school education as a free place where students can develop themselves without restrictions from their natrual parents, we should not accept the idea that parents should be voluntary in the school.
To sum up, we have to admit that in some culture or society, a dedicated and responsible leader in the family, namly a paragon, is a classic and traditional kind of imagination for the parents. Based on this idea some people might support the voluntory responsibility of parents into their childrens' school life. However upon further analysis into the society, rethinking our belief regarding school education, we will find that the claim is not sound and should not be accepted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...rents into their childrens school life. However upon further analysis into the society,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, whereas, at least, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2952.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 589.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01188455008 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63863886774 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404074702886 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 907.2 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.951929054 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.6 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.45 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286885039773 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111070926945 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070067574887 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192831846476 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541010998276 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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