All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary.
Today there are numerous consulting firms studying a company as a structure and applying a preset list of rules to make their descisions.These recommendations wont always be apt to the situation.And who better than the company's employee to get the true feedback on the internal workings and improvements needed to run the company efficiently. Therefore,I mostly agree with this given statement.It is always self introspection that leads to clarity.When someone runs a company they have an obligation to their employees too, while expecting productivity from them.When a company takes into consideration the insights of their own employees it produces better results.
When a company asks their own employees about their suggestions,it makes the employee valued.The feel reponsoble for the organization they are working for.These suggestions may be refreshing outlook than what the monotonous suggestions consultancies give.For example if a companys results are down in a specific quarter,rather than a consultancy forcing new practices of working upon the employees,if we directly ask the reason of the ppor performance to the employees it would be beneificial.This would help them evaluate their own work.and also make them hold themselves accountable to the progrees of their company.Their insights could help the company discover whether they were overworked,or in some cases the employees talent wasnt been used to its capacity.This could be solved internally by assigning correct roles to aptly skilled persons.
Moreover, a consultant manages numerous companies at a time.They wont be able to provide personalized attention to each department of the company.Instead,if someone is assigned in the company to take monthly feedbacks from the employees,their progress could be monitored consistently.It could happen that a consultant takes quarterly meetings with the staff(given that they have other companies to attend to),it would be four months too late to address their concerns and correct their mistakes.Wheras if the company itself could monitor them regularly,and send feedback immediately,efficiency of the work would be maintained.
However,we may concede that sometimes a outside perspective could give unbiased and may be a stern approach to solve a issue in problematic times.Their interference may avoid internal politics in the organization.Hence a balance of both would be beneficial for a company to work efficiently
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75138121547 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.58991053479 2.79657885939 128% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588397790055 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 72.0 23.0359550562 313% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 217.166848299 60.3974514979 360% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 416.4 118.986275619 350% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 72.4 23.4991977007 308% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.0 5.21951772744 364% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 36.0 7.80617977528 461% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36761780172 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213882741134 0.0831039109588 257% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491400700984 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234938225487 0.150359130593 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485086193031 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 41.9 14.1392134831 296% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.06 48.8420337079 -21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.92365168539 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.5 12.1743820225 267% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.25 12.1639044944 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.14 8.38706741573 145% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 11.8971910112 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.8 11.2143820225 275% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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