The speaker states that although luxuries and conveniences of modern life are harmless,they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. I strongly agree with the speaker as we can see people nowadays are becoming so much dependent on the modern inventions and the luxuries items that they have stopped to grow up independently. We can consider some of the points that aptly illustrates the accord with the speaker.
At first, let us talk about the automobiles. This is also one of the modern inventions of the people that has aided luxuries and comfortableness to the people`s life. In short term basis, this seem to provide every necessary comfortness to people and seems meticulously harmless but as the time passes by, people`s daily life get changed. The day comes when they can`t even go certain distance far from their house. They become totally dependent on those vehicles and this affects their lifestyle on longterm basis.
Another point can be taken as the modern advancement in the technology and the luxuries items like mobiles,internet,laptop,calculator etc. In the earlier days,people used to write on the notes and deliver it to the postal services to get the message delivered. And now , we can see mobiles in each and every people`s hand that has made people`s life easier than before. And people have started to become fully dependent in these gadgets and these have already become a part of their life. This has increased people`s dependencies on these gadgets. Even small childrens are found hanging in these gadgets playing games and being obscessed to virtual reality rather than playing around outside of the virtual world.
However, the luxuries and modernization has given the best part of people`s life. They aren`t totally harmful. People are getting chance to get to the higher level of advancement and enjoy the best part of their life. The main thing about them is that people must know by themselves on which part they must be dependent and on which part they must be acting independent individually. If they can differentiate between them then they can have a luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life in a strong and independent way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...conveniences of modern life are harmless,they actually prevent people from developing...
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Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... grow up independently. We can consider some of the points that aptly illustrates the accor...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stance far from their house. They become totally dependent on those vehicles and ...
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Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... longterm basis. Another point can be taken as the modern advancement in the t...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , internet
...logy and the luxuries items like mobiles,internet,laptop,calculator etc. In the earlier d...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , calculator
...uries items like mobiles,internet,laptop,calculator etc. In the earlier days,people used to...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , people
...ptop,calculator etc. In the earlier days,people used to write on the notes and deliver ...
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Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ver it to the postal services to get the message delivered. And now , we can see ...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s to get the message delivered. And now , we can see mobiles in each and every pe...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...adgets playing games and being obscessed to virtual reality rather than playing a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, then, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22865013774 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26877363135 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3536530333 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8947368421 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10526315789 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302983272628 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102846730735 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119606460466 0.0758088955206 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20397534276 0.150359130593 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089006563049 0.0667264976115 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.