The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

In the above statement the author claims that in order to prepare the young generation for leadership in government or any other field, the best way is to promote the feeling of cooperation and not competition. I agree with the statement to a large extent as having a cooperating attitude plays a major role in becoming successful. competition on the other hand is can be lucrative only if it is healthy.

in today’s world we see the technology is getting advanced, many new jobs are coming in the market and everyone is just going crazy chasing their dreams. If we compare this time to times some decades earlier we can say that earlier not everyone was moving to cities and pursuing jobs The more prevalent jobs included small businesses, farming shops etc but in today’s world due to modernisation and technical advancement more people are into educating themselves and getting placed in companies. There is so much more competition as compared to previous times. Everyone is wanting to shine in the field they are in. If the person is a CFO, he is wanting to become the CEO, if a person is a CM, he is wanting to become a PM. In order to prepare young people for this sort of life the best way is to make them appreciate the importance of the role of cooperation.

When a person is not cooperative and is taking competition as a basis of becoming successful,, this is what will bring that person down. It might benefit him in a short term but is definitely not going to be of good help in a long term. The feeling of competition burns the person from inside and destroys everything eventually. It always starts off as healthy competition but the feeling of competition is never a mellow feeling, it always transforms to something more intense, more heated. This creates a feeling of jealousy and jealousy always instigates the person to harm the other person and therefore it might start off well but never ends well. The only person we should compete with is ourself as competing with ourself will always make us better than what we were.

Sometimes healthy competition is also not bad if a person just sticks to keeping it healthy. A little sense of competition is appreciated as far as it is not harming anyone and also keeping the person calm from inside. Competition should be perceived as a feeling of inspiration and motivation one gets from someone else and wishes to achieve the same. This feeling is always healthy and if it remains like that I would definitely promote this feeling of healthy competition.

Sense of cooperation is very necessary in life and comes into play mostly when one has to settle for less or settle with colleagues one doesn’t like or a boss one despises. And hence I agree with the author’s claim to a great extent.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Competition
...ys a major role in becoming successful. competition on the other hand is can be lucrative o...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...be lucrative only if it is healthy. in today's world we see the technolog...
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Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...as compared to previous times. Everyone is wanting to shine in the field they are in. If t...
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Line 3, column 654, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...they are in. If the person is a CFO, he is wanting to become the CEO, if a person is a CM,...
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Line 3, column 708, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...become the CEO, if a person is a CM, he is wanting to become a PM. In order to prepare you...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive commas
Suggestion: ,
...tition as a basis of becoming successful,, this is what will bring that person dow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, well, as to, sort of, on the other hand, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72895277207 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77632953442 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464065708419 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9108421922 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.666666667 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1904761905 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136863211478 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433708335847 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953222945971 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856477913175 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782809634936 0.0667264976115 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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