People possess different opinions on whether the best way to cultivate young people for leadership in government or industry is to cooperate with others. Some may think competition is more essential for young generations to lead groups. As far as I am concerned, cooperation will still be the best way of learning leadership.
First and foremost, to become a good leader, one needs to have a good communication skill so that he can deliver any kinds of news to his employees without any misunderstanding. And cooperation enables young people to learn communication skills efficiently since they always have to discuss with their team members. For example, MBA students at Harvard University have many group projects to help students learn how to communicate with other students. Also, If a leader in government does not have a clear communication skill, his team members can not function well on what he wants them to do. For example, Taipei city mayor, Wen-Jo Ko, visited China last month. However, because of his poor communication skill, his assistant misunderstood his order and live-streamed a important conference meeting on facebook, which was what Chinese government disallowed. Many people argue that he seldom cooperate with others in his early age, and that is why he has a bad communication skill as a leader.
In addition, it is vital for leaders to enlighten their team members and help their members to grow, and through cooperation, young people will have better understanding of how to inspire others. A study from UCL shows more than 70 percents of employees will obey and believe in their boss if their manager can always help them become the better version of themselves. And people learn how to encourage others by cooperating with other people. For example, when doing a group project, to make the whole team excellent, one will teach other mates how to write a better essay, and help other revise their mistake. As a result, cooperation can definitely assist young people become better leaders.
Admittedly, some detractors think only smart people can lead a team, and through competition, we can quickly define who is the most intelligent person. However, though smart people is a important element for leadership, but it is not the most essential one. For example, Steve Jobs, Apple CEO, ever said that he is not the most intelligent person in his team, yet through cooperating with the most smart members in his team, they managed to develop the latest Iphone products and make Apple profitable in the long run. Apparently, cooperation is defintely more crucial than competition.
In conclusion, in order to help young people prepare for leadership in industry or government, cooperation is the most essential skill set that young people should have.
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- TOEFL T P O 30 Integrated Writing Task 91
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 771, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...sunderstood his order and live-streamed a important conference meeting on faceboo...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...person. However, though smart people is a important element for leadership, but i...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 455.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13406593407 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87350009178 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498901098901 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0961824893 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.8 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22018904521 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821277201808 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064597122855 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159866359316 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748008029967 0.0667264976115 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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