"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

Cooperation is behavioural attribute. Yes , all children must be taught to cooperate with people. With cooperation we can not only increase our knowledge base we can help others to enhance their knowledge. The author seems to be maintaining that competition kills knowledge and it can cause war and hatred. But I believe that both cooperation and competition should be balanced from the leaders, be it any field education ,industry etc. In order to thrive and create a balanced society.

Yes, Indeed we should teach young ones aspiring to be leader to be cooperative. Lets say a young one is planning to become a politician, he has to know how to co-operate with people. Since most of the countries are democratic, where candidates are choses because they possess certain ideals. People chose them because they have faith on the leader they have chosen. If there is something that creates imbalance in society , Like say law and order problem communal riot etc , leader must be cooperative and try to reach a reasonable concensus.Leader must not instead take favour in the interest of certain party. If the leader does that he will face hatred from the people. Leader may not be elected for his next term. Its true for any other government related fields such as police , income tax officers etc.

While its true that cooperation is healthy , it doesnt mean that competition is anathma to the future aspring leaders. Competition is also must. Consider semiconductor industry for example, companies such as Qualcomm, Mediatec etc are continuously trying to get some new innovative products to market. One of the greatest entrepreneurs of our generation , Elon musk is trying to get satellites into space at much cheaper price approx $4000$ / pound. It is indeed competition , but does that mean its unhealthy ; By no means. It makes others to work hard towards getting better technologies at much better price point. This will indeed help society to grow, flourish.

Competition is absolute must , if there is no competition in a said industry, either that industry will be Market monopoly or worse, innovation will be hindered in that said field. No competition can make companies to behave according to thier will. Increasing price as they feel to be.For example consider petroleum industry. hypothetically; lets say there was only one fossil resource all over the world and is owned by a single company, the leader of the industry can play as per his whim and vary the fuel rate accordingly. It can either create market imbalance or it can be a disaster for the leader and the company , that is people might find an alternate energy resources.

So finally my belief is that in order for society to flourish it should teach cooperation, but doesnt mean that they shouldnt teach the person to not to be competitve. Competition has its own advantages many times.Its the balance of competition and cooperation with which we can achieve the best goals and imrpove the society.

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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'finally', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241316270567 0.240241500013 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.202925045704 0.157235817809 129% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0658135283364 0.0880659088768 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0310786106033 0.0497285424764 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0566727605119 0.0444667217837 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0895795246801 0.12292977631 73% => OK
Participles: 0.0383912248629 0.0406280797675 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82365822645 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0402193784278 0.030933414821 130% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0749542961609 0.0997080785238 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0420475319927 0.0249443105267 169% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0091407678245 0.0148568991511 62% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2992.0 2732.02544248 110% => OK
No of words: 505.0 452.878318584 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92475247525 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.358415841584 0.366273622748 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.251485148515 0.280924506359 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184158415842 0.200843997647 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.124752475248 0.132149295362 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82365822645 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 219.290929204 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524752475248 0.48968727796 107% => OK
Word variations: 63.1470887487 55.4138127331 114% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0357142857 23.380412469 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3682217414 59.4972553346 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.857142857 141.124799967 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0357142857 23.380412469 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.392857142857 0.674092028746 58% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.21349557522 480% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.1842291372 51.4728631049 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.27044025157 1.64882698954 77% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334655728503 0.391690518653 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0960139860424 0.123202303941 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0668733616115 0.077325440228 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.411832830355 0.547984918172 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130778429573 0.149214159877 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102411079517 0.161403998019 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436717905994 0.0892212321368 49% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.291375681327 0.385218514788 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0367843210549 0.0692045440612 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224452153181 0.275328986314 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492755641905 0.0653680567796 75% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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